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When travelling back home on the train last week you lost your wallet. The wallet contains some valuable things. In your letter, write to the Station Manager

When travelling back home on the train last week you lost your wallet. The wallet contains some valuable things. In your letter, write to the Station Manager m1DR1
Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to you as I have left my wallet on a train and would like it to be returned. The wallet was left on the 5. 48 pm train on the City line travelling towards Beachside on Tuesday last week. I got on at City North and left the train at Downtown. I suspect the wallet fell out of my coat pocket as I was getting off the train. My wallet is made of black leather with the logo “Armani” embossed on the front. It contains some important documents such as my driving licence and credit cards, as well as some family photographs that are of great personal value to me, in particular one of my late mother. I would be grateful if you would make enquiries into the whereabouts of the wallet and keep it for me. I can collect the wallet at the railway lost property office at the Downtown train station. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours faithfully, Andrew Moreton
Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing to you as I have
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left
my
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wallet
on a
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and would like it to
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wallet
was
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left
on the 5. 48 pm
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on the City line travelling towards
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Beachside
on Tuesday
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last week
. I
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got
on at City North and
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left
the
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train
at Downtown. I suspect the
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wallet
fell out of my coat pocket as I was getting off the train.

My
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wallet
is made
of black leather with the logo “Armani” embossed on the front. It contains
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some
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important
documents such as my driving
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licence
and credit cards,
as well
as
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some
family photographs that are of great personal value to me,
in particular
one of my late mother.

I would be grateful if you would
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make
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enquiries
into the whereabouts of the
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wallet
and
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keep
it for me. I can collect the
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wallet
at the railway lost property office at the Downtown
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train
station.

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I
look forward to hearing from you
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.

Yours
faithfully
,

Andrew
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Moreton
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IELTS letter When travelling back home on the train last week you lost your wallet. The wallet contains some valuable things. In your letter, write to the Station Manager

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
169 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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