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Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Two persons cannot be friends if one is richer than the other.

Two persons cannot be friends if one is richer than the other. 9LGbx
There is no doubt that people always have a hard time to maintain their relationship, especially friendship. Numerous factors can devastate a tight bond between friends; one of those is economical distinction. Some people agree that two people cannot be friends if one is richer than the other; yet, I do not agree with the statement. To begin with, personal matching can take place on different social or economic levels. Mostly, people tend to have a relationship as friends when they feel comfortable when they spend time together. For example, when I was in elementary school, my family did not have much money but they wanted me to go a good school. On the first day of the school, I felt uncomfortable since many friends of mine were rich. Since we took many classes together, we learned each other’s personality. Moreover, fortunately, our personalities matched, so we were getting along very well. Although my friends and I are different economically, we liked each other and become good friends forever. In addition, personally, I believe that people acquire a long lasting friendship if they open their minds and accept others into their hearts sincerely; nevertheless, one is richer than the other. In fact, even though the person who is richer has an attitude and personality distinct from the other, they can adapt themselves to minimize the differences among them and have a good relationship. For instance, since I became a pharmacist and have a high income, my old friends, from elementary school, and I have different perspectives. Every time I go back to my hometown and hang out with the old friends, I try to adjust myself and accept the way they are sincerely. We always have a great time together because we try to understand each other and get rid of the external differences. In conclusion, economic difference would not be a problem if people have matching personalities and try to adjust their thoughts in order to maintain a good relationship. Therefore, I would highly recommend disregarding the external factors, such as wealth, that are not significantly relevant to a friendship.
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always have a
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to maintain their
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relationship
,
especially
friendship. Numerous factors can devastate a tight bond between
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friends
; one of those is economical distinction.
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people
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agree
that two
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cannot be
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if one is richer than the
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;
yet
, I do not
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with the statement.

To
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with, personal matching can take place on
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different
social or economic levels.
Mostly
,
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people
tend to have a
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relationship
as
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friends
when they feel comfortable when they spend
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time
together.
For example
, when I was in elementary
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school
, my family did not have much money
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but
they wanted me to go a
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good
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school
. On the
first
day of the
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school
, I felt uncomfortable since
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many
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friends
of mine were rich. Since we took
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many
classes together, we learned each
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other’s
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personality
.
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,
fortunately
, our personalities matched,
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so
we were getting along
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very
well. Although my
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friends
and I are
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different
economically
, we liked each
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other
and become
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good
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friends
forever.

In addition
,
personally
, I believe that
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people
acquire a
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long lasting
friendship if they open their minds and accept others into their hearts
sincerely
;
nevertheless
, one is richer than the
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other
. In fact,
even though
the person who is richer has an attitude and
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personality
distinct from the
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other
, they can adapt themselves to minimize the differences among them and have a
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good
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relationship
.
For instance
, since I became a pharmacist and have a high income, my
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old
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friends
, from elementary
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school
, and I have
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different
perspectives. Every
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time
I go back to my hometown and hang out with the
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old
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friends
, I try to adjust myself and accept the way they are
sincerely
. We always have a great
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time
together
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because
we try to understand each
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other
and
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get
rid of the external differences.

In conclusion
, economic difference would not be a problem if
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people
have matching personalities and try to adjust their thoughts in order to maintain a
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good
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relationship
.
Therefore
, I would
highly
recommend disregarding the external factors, such as wealth, that are not
significantly
relevant to a friendship.
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