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The following appeared in a letter to the editor of a local newspaper from a citizen of the state of Impecunia."Two years ago our neighboring state, Lucria, began a state lottery to supplement tax revenues for education and public health. Today, Lucria sp

The following appeared in a letter to the editor of a local newspaper from a citizen of the state of Impecunia. " Two years ago our neighboring state, Lucria, began a state lottery to supplement tax revenues for education and public health. Today, Lucria sp 15PXy
The author of this argument claims that establishing a lottery can help in improving education and public health through tax revenues in the state of Impecunia. In order to substantiate this claim, the citizen refers to the experience of neighboring state Lucria in foundation of such a lottery. The letter also notes that a survey accomplished and published in the state of Impecunia proves the high interest of citizens of this state in gambling. The argument rests on a series on unconvincing assumptions, and is therefore unpersuasive as it stands. First of all, the excerpt's author bases his claim partly on the fact that success of neighboring state in setting up a lottery and taking tax means success of the state of Impercunia. However, the author provides no evidence about wealth condition of two states. If Impercunia state's citizens are poor, people are not able to participate in lottery and spend their money in such places. Lack of such cogent evidence to evaluate the people's lifestyle, I cannot express my compliance to the demand of the citizen who has suggested. In further support of his claim the letter states that a survey performed in the state of Impercunia discloses high interest and tendency of people living in this toward gambling(an average spending of $50 per person per year). However, since this amount can be skewed by few high amounts, it is not a reliable source to make decision that people like gambling. Besides, this survey has been completed in the capital city, we cannot reach a point that other small and big cities are inclined in gambling. In addition, the excerpt's author is nearly sure that gabling can be successful in helping children and education. Nevertheless, one cannot forget the negative effects of such lottery. In fact, some people may lose their money there, and then are not able to more support their children. Besides, students may be motivated to spend much money in such a lottery, and distracted on spending om more critical issues. Presence of such risks and providing no information from author to dismiss them, the author cannot defend the importance of building a lottery and its positive effects for education and public health. The author is of the opinion that paying taxes by the hope-to-be-established lottery can be beneficial. However, we have no information about tax rules in this state. Perhaps, this state totally have low tax law. Or perhaps, some businesses like lottery encounter low tax. Existence of such alternative explanations for not tax and paying it, It is really cumbersome to vote on the achievement of this suggestion. In conclusion, the author's evidence lends little credible support to his claim. To persuade me that this suggestion will be successful, the author must bolster this letter by providing specific information about people's lifestyle and condition in the state of Impercunia. To better evaluate this argument, we need more information about the participants in the survey. We would also need some more document about tax rules in the state of Impercunia.
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of this argument
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claims
that establishing a
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lottery
can
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help
in improving education and public health through
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revenues in the
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state
of
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Impecunia
. In order to substantiate this
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, the
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refers to the experience of neighboring
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state
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Lucria
in foundation of such a
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lottery
. The letter
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notes that a
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accomplished and published in the
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state
of
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Impecunia
proves the high interest of
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citizens
of this
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state
in gambling. The argument rests on a series on unconvincing assumptions, and is
therefore
unpersuasive as it stands.

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, the excerpt's
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author
bases his
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claim
partly on the fact that success of neighboring
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state
in setting up a
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lottery
and taking
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tax
means success of the
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state
of
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Impercunia
.
However
, the
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author
provides no evidence about wealth condition of two
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states
. If
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Impercunia
state's
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citizens
are poor,
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people
are not able to participate in
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lottery
and spend their money in such places. Lack of such cogent evidence to evaluate the
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people
's lifestyle, I cannot express my compliance to the demand of the
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citizen
who has suggested.

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further
support of his
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the letter
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states
that a
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performed in the
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state
of
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Impercunia
discloses high interest and tendency of
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people
living in this toward gambling(an average spending of $50 per person per year).
However
, since this amount can
be skewed
by few high amounts, it is not a reliable source to
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make
decision that
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people
like gambling.
Besides
, this
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has
been completed
in the capital city, we cannot reach a point that other
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small
and
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cities
are inclined
in gambling.

In addition
, the excerpt's
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author
is
nearly
sure that
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gabling
can be successful in helping children and education.
Nevertheless
, one cannot forget the
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negative
effects of such
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lottery
. In fact,
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some
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people
may lose their money there, and then are not able to more support their children.
Besides
, students may
be motivated
to spend much money in such a
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lottery
, and distracted on spending
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more critical issues. Presence of such
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and providing no
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information
from
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to dismiss them, the
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author
cannot defend the importance of building a
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lottery
and its
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positive
effects for education and public health.

The
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author
is of the opinion that paying
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taxes
by the hope-to-be-established
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lottery
can be beneficial.
However
, we have no
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information
about
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tax
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rules
in this
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state
. Perhaps, this
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totally
have low
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law. Or perhaps,
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some
businesses like
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lottery
encounter low
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tax
. Existence of such alternative explanations for not
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and paying it, It is
really
cumbersome to vote on the achievement of this suggestion.

In conclusion
, the author's evidence lends
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credible support to his
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. To persuade me that this suggestion will be successful, the
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must
bolster this letter by providing specific
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people
's lifestyle and condition in the
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state
of
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Impercunia
. To better evaluate this argument, we need more
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information
about the participants in the
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. We would
also
need
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more document about
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of
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IELTS letter The following appeared in a letter to the editor of a local newspaper from a citizen of the state of Impecunia. " Two years ago our neighboring state, Lucria, began a state lottery to supplement tax revenues for education and public health. Today, Lucria sp

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