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We are looking for someone in August to assist our lifeguards, provide supervision during beach activities and observe swimmers. Write to the Lifeguard Manager, saying what your experience and qualifications are and stating the reasons why you are suitable for the job. Write your email in 140-190 words in an appropriate style.

We are looking for someone in August to assist our lifeguards, provide supervision during beach activities and observe swimmers. Write to the Lifeguard Manager, saying what your experience and qualifications are and stating the reasons why you are suitable for the job. Write your email in 140-190 words in an appropriate style. q0dEG
Dear Sir or Madam, I am looking for outdoor work during the summer holidays and I would like to apply for the position of lifeguard assistant, which I saw advertised in my university’s student newspaper. I am 20 years old and at present I am studying Physical Education. I am a strong swimmer and have recently had first aid training. I very much enjoy working with people and for the last two summers I have been working as an assistant ranger in a National Park, where I had to provide information to the public about using the park and provide emergency assistance to park users. Now I am looking for something different. I think I would be a suitable candidate for the position because I have been described as calm in a crisis and someone who works well with others. I am available for the whole of August and would be happy to attend an interview at any time. I look forward to hearing from you as soon as possible. Yours faithfully, Ivan Ivienen
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am looking for outdoor work during the summer holidays and I would like to apply for the position of lifeguard assistant, which I
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advertised in my university’s student newspaper.

I am 20 years
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and at present I am studying Physical Education.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
am a strong swimmer and have recently had
first
aid training.
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I
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very
much enjoy working with
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people
and for the last two summers I have been working as an assistant ranger in a National Park, where I had to provide information to the public about using the park and provide emergency assistance to park users.
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Now
I am looking for something
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different
.

I
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think
I would be a suitable candidate for the position
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because
I have been
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described
as calm in a crisis and someone who works well with others.

I am available for the whole of August and would be happy to attend an interview at any time.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
look forward to hearing from you as
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soon
as possible.

Yours
faithfully
,

Ivan
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Ivienen
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IELTS letter We are looking for someone in August to assist our lifeguards, provide supervision during beach activities and observe swimmers. Write to the Lifeguard Manager, saying what your experience and qualifications are and stating the reasons why you are suitable for the job. Write your email in 140-190 words in an appropriate style.

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  American English
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173 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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