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TV violance program for family entertainment

TV violance program for family entertainment OrLM7
Dear sir, I am a father of 2 daughters. Our family always sits down to watch the television every morning after breakfast. I believe that this is the time for family to spend together. So regularly we always like to watch family comedies or other such programs. But yesterday the family program that we always like to watch, was totally got way out of line. The program is about a father who is drunk and likes to hurt his own children. I find That this is absolutely not ok to be shown at a time like this. However, I would really recommend the TV station to change the time from morning to evening. Because I found the content of this program too much for a child to be seen at the age 7 years old. So I decided to write this letter to the manager of this show. I will no longer be watching any of the shows unless it is moved to a later time slot. Therefore I would ask you to ensure that family entertainment morning program are suitable for the time.
Dear sir,

I am a father of 2 daughters. Our
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always sits down to
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watch
the television every morning after breakfast. I believe that this is the
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time
for
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family
to spend together.
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So
regularly
we always like to
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watch
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family
comedies or other such
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programs
.
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But
yesterday the
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family
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program
that we always like to
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watch
, was
totally
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got
way out of line. The
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program
is about a father who
is drunk
and likes to hurt his
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own
children. I find That this is
absolutely
not ok to
be shown
at a
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time
like this.
However
, I would
really
recommend the TV station to
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change
the
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time
from morning to evening.
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Because
I found the content of this
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program
too much for a child to be
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seen
at the age 7 years
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old
.
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So
I decided to write this letter to the manager of this
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show
. I will no longer be watching any of the
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shows
unless it is
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moved
to a later
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time
slot.
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Therefore
I would ask you to ensure that
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family
entertainment morning
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program
are suitable for the
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time
.
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IELTS letter TV violance program for family entertainment

Letter
  American English
2 paragraphs
184 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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