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trains arrive late and are overcrowded

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing in regards to the train moving from London to Manchester which has caused serious problems for passengers. There are frequently delays, making difficulties such as overcrowded and long queues at the station. I am quite sure if you visit this station will find that people there complaining about this delay and how this poor service has negative effects on their daily commuting. More often than not, people arrive too late at their destinations and as there are not enough carriages, they have to stay on long queues to get into the train. All that has made the station very crowded. Consider this circumstance; I’d like to ask you for putting more trains, ensuring that there are enough carriages to move people to work or home. And also it would be much better if you push your employees to stick more to the schedule given by your company. I look forward to a swift resolution to this matter. Yours faithfully,
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing
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in regards to
the train moving from London to Manchester which has caused serious problems for passengers. There are
frequently
delays, making difficulties such as overcrowded and long queues at the station.

I am quite sure if you visit this station will find that
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people
there complaining about this delay and how this poor service has
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negative
effects on their daily commuting. More
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often
than not,
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people
arrive too late at their destinations and as there are not
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enough
carriages, they
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have to
stay on long queues to
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get
into the train. All that has made the station
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very
crowded.

Consider this circumstance; I’d like to ask you for putting more trains, ensuring that there are
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enough
carriages to
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move
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people
to work or home. And
also
it would be much better if you push your employees to stick more to the schedule
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given
by your
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company
.

I look forward to a swift resolution to this matter.

Yours
faithfully
,

IELTS letter trains arrive late and are overcrowded

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
166 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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