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Train service in your area is reduced. Write a letter to your train company - explain how it affects you - describe the situation - tell the train company what you would like them to do.

Train service in your area is reduced. Write a letter to your train company - explain how it affects you - describe the situation - tell the train company what you would like them to do. pR802
Dear Sir I am Elaine and I an resident of Kurukshetra. I am requesting you to modify the train services in this area. I am working as a Dental Surgeon in multispeciality hospital Karnal which is 2 hours far away from my home. I have to go by trains because of this long distance however, the train services are fewer to this junction due to which sometimes I do not reach on time at my job. The Kurukshetra city is highly populated and a number of people visit to other plcaes on daily basis for work and education. In addition to it, many individuals wages depen on the passengers of trains and hence it is necessary to rectify the various problems of train services there. The nation has several railway companies but I personally think that the Indian expressways is the best among all as it provides so many fascilities to the passengers. Consequently, I would like that this company should invest on Kurukshetra junction to make it better. I hope to get positive result from your side. Yours Sincerely Elaine.
Dear Sir

I am Elaine and I
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an
resident of
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Kurukshetra
. I am requesting you to modify the
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train
services in this area.

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I
am working as a Dental Surgeon in
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multispeciality
hospital
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Karnal
which is 2 hours far away from my home.
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I
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have to
go by
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trains
because of this
long distance
however
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
train
services are fewer to this junction due to which
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sometimes
I do not reach on time at my job.

The
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Kurukshetra
city is
highly
populated and a number of
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people
visit to other
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plcaes
on daily basis for work and education.
In addition
to it,
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many
individuals wages
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depen
on the passengers of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
trains
and
hence
it is necessary to rectify the various problems of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
train
services there.

The nation has several railway
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companies
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
I
personally
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think
that the Indian expressways is the best among all as it provides
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so
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many
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fascilities
to the passengers.
Consequently
, I would like that this
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company
should invest on
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Kurukshetra
junction to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
it better.

I hope to
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get
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
result from your side.

Yours
Sincerely


Elaine.

IELTS letter Train service in your area is reduced. Write a letter to your train company - explain how it affects you - describe the situation - tell the train company what you would like them to do.

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
181 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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