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Writing a letter for help

Writing a letter for help MM7Le

I am writing to you because I need help with an assignment I received from my professor at the university. It is about ‘European Society in the Twentieth Century' and I looked at my local library but couldn’t find a satisfying source. Then you came to my mind. I know you are knowledgeable about this subject. That’s why I write you. Everything I found about the subject was about Second World War and its effects on people. But I want something more about the cultural side of society. How was their culture before the twentieth century and what changed in the twentieth century? About the new generation born during this time. How did they perceive the rapidly changing world around them? These are the questions I want to be answered. I know you are busy and you are working but this will help me greatly. If you can answer these questions for me I will be very grateful. I hope I am not imposing on you so much. Hope to hear from you soon.

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IELTS letter Writing a letter for help

Letter

American English

1 paragraphs

174 words

6.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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One main idea per paragraph
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Include an introduction and conclusion
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Support main points with an explanation and then an example
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Vary your linking phrases using synonyms

Lexical Resource: 6.5

Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes

Grammatical Range: 6.5

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 7.0

Answer all parts of the question
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Present relevant ideas
Fully explain these ideas
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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