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topic missed bithday celebration

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Dear Sarah, I am sincerely apologizing to you for no-show on your birthday last week. I could have let you know that but I totally forgot to tell you that day. The reason why I missed your birthday is that there had been an unexpected situation I had to handle. That day my boss assigned me a lot of work that need to be done by the evening. I was panicked and badly concentrated on the work. All of sudden I remembered the birthday celebration. That was too late to call you that I couldn’t make it. I knew that you were really looking forward to this celebration with me and I am very sorry. How about having dinner next weekend together at the restaurant on the corner of your home? I would like to make it up to you because of my no-show event and for your forgiveness. It is all on me. We can have a good chat and dinner. Please let me know if you fancy it. I hope that you would appreciate my situation. Best wishes nick name

Dear Sarah,

I am sincerely
 apologizing to you for no-This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :demonstrateportrayindicatedisplay
show
 on your birthday ‘last week’ indicates a finished event of the past. Please check the predicate's tense.
last week
. I could have This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :authorize
let
 you know that This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 I totally
 forgot to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :inform
tell
 you that day.

The reason why I missed your birthday is that there had been an unexpected situation I had to handle. That day my boss assigned me This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a plethora ofa number ofnumerous
a lot of
 work that need to be done
 by the evening. I was panicked
 and badly
 concentrated on the work. Consider using "All of a sudden" or "All of the sudden".All of a suddenAll of the sudden
All of sudden
 I remembered the birthday celebration. That was too late to call you that I couldn’t This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :createconstructmanufactureproduce
make
 it. I knew that you were really
 looking forward to this celebration with Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).me, and
me and
 I am This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:extremelyimmenselysupremelysuperb
very
 sorry.

How about having dinner next
 weekend together at the restaurant on the corner of your home? I would like to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :createconstructmanufactureproduce
make
 it up to you This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 of my no-This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :demonstrateportrayindicatedisplay
show
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :occasionhappening
event
 and for your forgiveness. It is all on me. We can have a This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :beneficialproduct
good
 chat and dinner. This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :satisfy
Please
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :authorize
let
 me know if you fancy it.

I hope that you would appreciate my situation.

Best wishes

nick name

IELTS letter topic missed bithday celebration

Letter

American English

6 paragraphs

181 words

6.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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One main idea per paragraph
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Include an introduction and conclusion
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Support main points with an explanation and then an example
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Vary your linking phrases using synonyms

Lexical Resource: 6.5

Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 5.0

Answer all parts of the question
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Present relevant ideas
Fully explain these ideas
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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