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topic missed bithday celebration

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Dear Sarah, I am sincerely apologizing to you for no-show on your birthday last week. I could have let you know that but I totally forgot to tell you that day. The reason why I missed your birthday is that there had been an unexpected situation I had to handle. That day my boss assigned me a lot of work that need to be done by the evening. I was panicked and badly concentrated on the work. All of sudden I remembered the birthday celebration. That was too late to call you that I couldn’t make it. I knew that you were really looking forward to this celebration with me and I am very sorry. How about having dinner next weekend together at the restaurant on the corner of your home? I would like to make it up to you because of my no-show event and for your forgiveness. It is all on me. We can have a good chat and dinner. Please let me know if you fancy it. I hope that you would appreciate my situation. Best wishes nick name
Dear Sarah,

I am
sincerely
apologizing to you for no-
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
show
on your birthday
‘last week’ indicates a finished event of the past. Please check the predicate's tense.
last week
. I could have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
you know that
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
I
totally
forgot to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
tell
you that day.

The reason why I missed your birthday is that there had been an unexpected situation I had to handle. That day my boss assigned me
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
work that need to
be done
by the evening. I
was panicked
and
badly
concentrated on the work.
Consider using "All of a sudden" or "All of the sudden".
All of sudden
I remembered the birthday celebration. That was too late to call you that I couldn’t
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
it. I knew that you were
really
looking forward to this celebration with
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
me and
I am
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
sorry.

How about having dinner
next
weekend together at the restaurant on the corner of your home? I would like to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
it up to you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of my no-
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
show
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
event
and for your forgiveness. It is all on me. We can have a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
chat and dinner.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Please
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
me know if you fancy it.

I hope that you would appreciate my situation.

Best wishes

nick name
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IELTS letter topic missed bithday celebration

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
181 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 7.0
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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