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Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic? What are the benefits and disadvantages of this?

Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic? What are the benefits and disadvantages of this? x709
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to seek assistance about the laptop I bought from your company. The laptop was bought last year in December and the model is from MSI 7RD Stealth series. To begin with, The primary issue with the laptop is related to the battery. The battery is getting drainned in very short time and I needed to replace it. Moreover, meanwhile replacing the battery I accidently broke the connector which connects the battery with the circuit of the laptop. Meanwhile I need to use the laptop extensively for my work and I can use it only if it is plugged in with the charging adapter all the time as the battery connection is not possible. Sometimes I need to move around with my laptop and at that time having the charging adapter in hand is not always feasible. Could you please let me know if I can order this particular piece of battery connector from the company? if so I would be grateful if you can provide me details how can I place the order and how much it would cost? I am looking forward to your immediate respose as I mentioned before, without the battery installed in the laptop, it is utterly inconvenient to make use of it. Yours faithfully, Viraj Gohil
Dear Sir or Madam,

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bought
last year in December and the model is from MSI 7RD Stealth series.

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short time and I needed to replace it.
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I need to
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laptop
and at that time having the charging adapter in hand is not always feasible.

Could you
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please
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let
me know if I can order this particular piece of battery connector from the
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company
? if
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so
I would be grateful if you can provide me
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details
how can I place the order and how much it would cost?

I am looking forward to your immediate
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respose
as I mentioned
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before
, without the battery installed in the
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laptop
, it is
utterly
inconvenient to
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make
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use
of it.

Yours
faithfully
,

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Viraj
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Gohil
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IELTS letter Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic? What are the benefits and disadvantages of this?

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