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You are part of a group of musicians who meet on Tuesday and Friday evenings to practise in the community hall. You have been told, however, that it is no longer possible for the group to use the hall.

You are part of a group of musicians who meet on Tuesday and Friday evenings to practise in the community hall. You have been told, however, that it is no longer possible for the group to use the hall. 0oll
Dear Sir, I am Karan Patel a group member of KK musicians who used your community hall twice in a week. I am writing this letter to inform you that we play different kind of music in our shows. We play and sing different kind of songs which like all the age group. Recently we won the first price for our performance in the city. We do live performance on demand. We always try to full fill our community demand in any of our shows. Nowadays, we also start some classes to teach young generation how to pay tabla, guitar, piano and all. We infulence childrean to make their career in this industry, Through music we try to pass some good messages in society. I would like to request you please arrange some alternative days and time so that we can do the practice in community hall. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours sincerely, Karan Patel
Dear Sir,

I am
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Karan
Patel a group member of
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KK
musicians who
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used
your community hall twice in a week. I am writing this letter to inform you that we play
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
kind of music in our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
shows
.

We play and sing
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
kind of songs which like all the age group. Recently we won the
first
price for our performance in the city. We do
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
performance on demand. We always try to full fill our community demand in any of our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
shows
. Nowadays, we
also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
classes to teach young generation how to pay tabla, guitar, piano and all. We
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infulence
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childrean
to
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make
their career in this industry, Through music we try to pass
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
messages in society.

I would like to request you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
please
arrange
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
alternative days and time
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that we can do the practice in community hall. I look forward to hearing from you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
.

Yours
sincerely
,

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Karan
Patel

IELTS letter You are part of a group of musicians who meet on Tuesday and Friday evenings to practise in the community hall. You have been told, however, that it is no longer possible for the group to use the hall.

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158 words
6.0
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