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Hello I am Yeasmin Islam. I am from Bangladesh I have completed my Bachelor of Business Administration from Goalabazar Adarsha Women’s college, sylhet. I would like to future study in the UK and I have plan to take up a master’s degree course, particularly at the University of Suffolk because i knew at this University have standard education system and there have more facilities for the students, i want to further study there. I have enough skill and knowledge to be able to pursue an advanced study, and I believe that with further education, I can obtain superior degree in my professional life. I have chosen this program because this course will provide extensive business education, training and preparation for future career. The Master of Business Asministration at the University of Suffolk is an internationally recognised postgraduate course, it can improve my professional life and managers in business organisations. It have combines innumerable kind of courses, especially there have theoretical knowledge with practical experience, this course can build greater career of students in the private or public sector. This program have academic study with a diverse of other activities, which can develop all aspects of my personal development. There are also opportunities to undertake work placement or special projects, which will carry my personal life. The Master of Business Administration (MBA) at the University of Suffolk in the United Kindom will help me to build my career and a greater position, allowing me to manage business and corporate operation at all levels. I’ll can learn specialized skills such as strategic thinking, marketing, finace and management, which are project management, organisational behaviour and research methods etc. The University of Suffolk in the United Kindom offers higher education to students worldwide. I am interesting for study at the University of Suffolk in the Uk.
Hello

I am
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Yeasmin
Islam. I am from Bangladesh I have completed my Bachelor of
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Business
Administration from
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Goalabazar
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Adarsha
Women’s college,
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sylhet
. I would like to future
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study
in the UK and I have plan to take up a master’s degree
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course
,
particularly
at the
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University
of Suffolk
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because
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i
knew at this
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University
have standard
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education
system and there have more facilities for the students,
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i
want to
further
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study
there.
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I
have
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enough
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skill
and knowledge to be able to pursue an advanced
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study
, and I believe that with
further
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education
, I can obtain superior degree in my professional life.
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I
have chosen this program
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because
this
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course
will provide extensive
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business
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education
, training and preparation for future career.

The Master of
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Business
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Asministration
at the
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University
of Suffolk is an
internationally
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recognised
postgraduate
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course
, it can
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improve
my professional life and managers in
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business
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organisations
. It
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have
combines innumerable kind of
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courses
,
especially
there have theoretical knowledge with practical experience, this
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course
can build greater career of students in the private or public sector.
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This program have
academic
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study
with
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a diverse of
other activities, which can develop all aspects of my personal development. There are
also
opportunities to undertake work placement or special projects, which will carry my personal life.

The Master of
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Business
Administration (MBA) at the
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University
of Suffolk in the United
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Kindom
will
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help
me to build my career and a greater position, allowing me to manage
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business
and corporate operation at all levels. I’ll can learn specialized
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
such as strategic thinking, marketing,
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finace
and management, which are project management,
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organisational
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behaviour
and research methods etc.

The
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University
of Suffolk in the United
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Kindom
offers higher
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education
to students worldwide. I am interesting for
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study
at the
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University
of Suffolk in the
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Uk
.
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IELTS letter Today become your personal statement

Letter
  American English
4 paragraphs
302 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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