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To thank Mrs.Teacher for helping me to give a phone

To thank Mrs. Teacher for helping me to give a phone 6aPwW

Dear Madam. I wrote this letter to express my sincere thanks. Because you had assisted me carefully. I am a pupil. I am going to remind an event to you. That is to say, when I was going my teacher house, I was afraid of dogs in the street. I needed give money to my teacher but there were three dogs at least. They were dangerous. So, I began searching the phone. But I did not have a my mobilephone. When I was looking for it, one maths teacher was coming to work in our school. I considered that you had a mobile phone. Then I pleased phone to my teacher her. You helped me immediately. I am much obliged to you for your timely help. I lack words with which to express my attitude to you. I appreciate very much for your thought fullness. Thank you very much for your noble deeds. From Dear your pupil.

Dear Madam.

I wrote this letter to express my sincere thanks. “Because” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Because
 you had assisted me carefully
.

I am a pupil. I am going to remind an This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :occasionhappening
event
 to you. That is
 to say, when I was going my You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlecturersupervisorscholarassistantprofessortutor
teacher
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :residence
house
, I was afraid of dogs in the street. I needed give money to my You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlecturersupervisorscholarassistantprofessortutor
teacher
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 there were three dogs at least. They were This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:hazardousrisky
dangerous
. This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
So
, I began searching the phone. This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
But
 I did not have A determiner cannot combine with a possessive pronoun. Did you mean simply "my mobilephone" or "a mobilephone"?my mobilephonea mobilephone
a my mobilephone
. When I was looking for it, one Possible spelling mistake. 'maths' is British English.math
maths
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlecturersupervisorscholarassistantprofessortutor
teacher
 was coming to work in our school.

I considered that you had a mobile phone. Then I This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :satisfied
pleased
 phone to my You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlecturersupervisorscholarassistantprofessortutor
teacher
 her. You This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :assisted
helped
 me immediately.

I am much obliged to you for your timely This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :assistassistance
help
. I lack words with which to express my attitude to you.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
 appreciate This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:extremelyimmenselysupremelysuperb
very
 much for your This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :reckonedassumedbelievedconsidered
thought
 fullness. Thank you This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:extremelyimmenselysupremelysuperb
very
 much for your noble deeds.

From

Dear your pupil. 