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There have been some problems with the bus service, especially its reliability, in your area over the last two weeks. Write a letter to the manager of the bus company. In your letter • describe what the problems are • explain how these problems are affecting you • suggest what you would like the company to do

There have been some problems with the bus service, especially its reliability, in your area over the last two weeks. Write a letter to the manager of the bus company. In your letter • describe what the problems are • explain how these problems are affecting you • suggest what you would like the company to do 7DY2
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing this letter to express my dissatisfaction with some problems with the bus service over the last two weeks. I will explain myself in this letter. I take bus number 145 from North Burnaby to SFU every morning to attend lectures. I have always been pleased by the great services for the past 5 years. However, the bus service recently experiences an extremely long delay and a gap between available buses. It usually takes 10 to 15 minutes for the next bus to arrive, but now it doubles or even triples the wait time. In addition, the schedule seems unreliable and does not reflect the real arriving times. The issues above greatly affect my school performance as I am always late for classes, and it even made me skipped two classes because the bus never arrived. What's more, I had to call taxies three times in the past two weeks. It cost me a significant amount as my home is relatively far from the university. I suggest that the company could release a most reliable and updated schedule for bus 145. Besides, I suggest that the company can increase the number of serving buses to this routine. Hence, there will be more buses available and decrease the wait times. Thank you in advance for your consideration and assistance. Yours faithfully, Annabel
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter to express my dissatisfaction with
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some
problems with the bus service over the last two weeks. I will
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explain
myself in this letter.

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I
take bus number 145 from North
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Burnaby
to SFU every morning to attend lectures.
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I
have always been
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pleased
by the great services for the past 5 years.
However
, the bus service recently experiences an
extremely
long delay and a gap between available buses. It
usually
takes 10 to 15 minutes for the
next
bus to arrive,
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but
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
it doubles or even triples the wait time.
In addition
, the schedule seems unreliable and does not reflect the real arriving times.

The issues above
greatly
affect my school performance as I am always late for classes, and it even made me skipped two classes
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
the bus never arrived. What's more, I had to call
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taxies
three times in the past two weeks. It cost me a significant amount as my home is
relatively
far from the university.

I suggest that the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
could release a most reliable and updated schedule for bus 145.
Besides
, I suggest that the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
can increase the number of serving buses to this routine.
Hence
, there will be more buses available and decrease the wait times.

Thank you in advance for your consideration and assistance.

Yours
faithfully
,

Annabel
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IELTS letter There have been some problems with the bus service, especially its reliability, in your area over the last two weeks. Write a letter to the manager of the bus company. In your letter • describe what the problems are • explain how these problems are affecting you • suggest what you would like the company to do

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226 words
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