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There are some problems in the changing room in your sport center. Write a letter to the sport center manager. In your letter, you should: – Describe the problems in the changing room – Explain why the sport center is important for you – Suggest what the manager should do.

There are some problems in the changing room in your sport center. Write a letter to the sport center manager. In your letter, you should: – Describe the problems in the changing room – Explain why the sport center is important for you – Suggest what the manager should do. GYdo
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with the changing room facility in your sports center. I would like to highlight a couple of issues that were faced in the changing room. The First thing I would like to draw your attention to are the showers, many of them are not functioning properly. Also, the hot water mechanism fails during rush hour. In addition to this, I can see many lockers which are either without locks or door handles which makes things worse. I have been a member of this sports center for almost 6 years now but never have I faced such issues. I have been practicing my football on a regular basis for now and trying to make it into the state team this year. Hopefully, you can see how practicing at this stage is pretty crucial for me. To resolve the problem, I would appreciate it if you could fix the issue with the lockers. Furthermore, please add the showers to the regular maintenance activity. This will help in raising the standard of your sports facility. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours Faithfully, Nitin Waradkar
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with the changing room facility in your sports center.

I would like to highlight a couple of issues that
were faced
in the changing room. The
First
thing I would like to draw your attention to are the showers,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
of them are not functioning
properly
.
Also
, the hot water mechanism fails during rush hour.
In addition
to this, I can
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see
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
lockers which are either without locks or door
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handles
which
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makes
things worse.

I have been a member of this sports center for almost 6 years
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now
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but
never have I faced such issues. I have been practicing my football on a regular basis for
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
and trying to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
it into the state team this year.
Hopefully
, you can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
how practicing at this stage is pretty crucial for me.

To resolve the problem, I would appreciate it if you could
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
fix
the issue with the lockers.
Furthermore
,
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please
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
add
the showers to the regular maintenance activity. This will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
in raising the standard of your sports facility.

I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours
Faithfully
, Nitin
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IELTS letter There are some problems in the changing room in your sport center. Write a letter to the sport center manager. In your letter, you should: – Describe the problems in the changing room – Explain why the sport center is important for you – Suggest what the manager should do.

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193 words
6.0
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