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You would like to buy some electrical goods at a shop in a nearby town. Write a letter to the shop and ask if they have the things you want or whether they will be able to order them. Ask what the prices are and how long they will be able to hold the goods for you.

You would like to buy some electrical goods at a shop in a nearby town. Write a letter to the shop and ask if they have the things you want or whether they will be able to order them. Ask what the prices are and how long they will be able to hold the goods for you. 6Odx
Dear Sir, I live in near by village and would like to buy a drone for my college project. I am writing this letter to enquire about few details before I come to the shop in person. I would like to the know, if the advance drone from LG is available currently or if you could order for me if I confirm the requirement. Further more, I would like to know the price of the gadget, along with any warranty and guaranty provided with the purchase. In addition, please advise for how long would you hold the product in shop. So, I could arrange the required money for my electeonic drone and visit the shop. Thank you in advance and looking forward to hearing from you soon Yours faithfully, Rose
Dear Sir,

I
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live
in
Did you mean "nearby"?
near by
village and would like to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
a drone for my college project. I am writing this letter to
Possible spelling mistake. 'enquire' is British English.
enquire
about few
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
details
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
to the shop in person.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
would like to the know
If " if" starts an indirect question, you do not need to put a comma before it.
, if
the advance drone from LG is available
currently
or if you could order for me if I confirm the requirement.

Further
more, I would like to know the price of the gadget, along with any warranty and guaranty provided with the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchase
.

In addition
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
please
advise for how long would you hold the product in shop.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
, I could arrange the required money for my
Possible spelling mistake found.
electeonic
drone and visit the shop.

Thank you in advance and looking forward to hearing from you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon


Yours
faithfully
,

Rose

IELTS letter You would like to buy some electrical goods at a shop in a nearby town. Write a letter to the shop and ask if they have the things you want or whether they will be able to order them. Ask what the prices are and how long they will be able to hold the goods for you.

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
129 words
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text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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