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The office you work in does not have any cafeteria for staff. Write a letter to your manager to request setting up a cafeteria for the staff. In your letter, you should tell, what you heard about the inconvenience from the staff how you feel about it what suggestions you have about setting up a cafeteria

I am Trisha Chetani writing this letter to inform you about the difficulty our staffs are facing due to the lack of a cafeteria in our office premises. I hope you would take initiatives so that a cafeteria is established in our office. To embark with, I have come across many employees in our office during the last few weeks, who are working for eight to ten hours at a stretch without having sufficient lunch breaks as we have a major software release target next March. Due to COVID-19 restrictions, most of them can not bring lunch from home. They can not go out and have lunch as they did in the pre-COVID days either. I am one of the sufferers and I feel bad for all the employees who are having trouble due to the pandemic and the lack of our own cafeteria. The employees are putting hard work and dedication and their first priority is the successful release of the software. So if they are forced to work long hours without having lunch or some fresh cup of coffees, that would hamper their performance. I would appreciate it if we can have some healthy foods and drinks at our cafeteria, which is specially made for staffs. There is available space on the 9th floor, which is not used by any of the teams. We can use this space in particular because there is an open terrace, and our colleague will have a change in mind and place. Looking forward to your support regarding this. Yours faithfully, Trisha Chetani
I am Trisha
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Chetani
writing this letter to inform you about the difficulty our staffs are facing due to the lack of a
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cafeteria
in our office premises. I hope you would take initiatives
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so
that a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cafeteria
is established
in our office.

To embark with, I have
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come
across
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many
employees in our office during the last few weeks, who are working for eight to ten hours at a stretch without having sufficient lunch breaks as we have a major software release target
next
March. Due to COVID-19 restrictions, most of them can not bring lunch from home. They can not go out and have lunch as they did in the
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pre-COVID
days either.

I am one of the sufferers and I feel
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bad
for all the employees who are having trouble due to the pandemic and the lack of our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cafeteria
. The employees are putting
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
work and dedication and their
first
priority is the successful release of the software.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
if they
are forced
to work long hours without having lunch or
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
fresh cup of coffees, that would hamper their performance.

I would appreciate it if we can have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
healthy foods and drinks at our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cafeteria
, which is
specially
made for staffs. There is available space on the 9th floor, which is not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
by any of the teams. We can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
this space
in particular
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
there is an open terrace, and our colleague will have a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
in mind and place.

Looking forward to your support regarding this.

Yours
faithfully
,

Trisha
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Chetani

IELTS letter The office you work in does not have any cafeteria for staff. Write a letter to your manager to request setting up a cafeteria for the staff. In your letter, you should tell, what you heard about the inconvenience from the staff how you feel about it what suggestions you have about setting up a cafeteria

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