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e have been some problems with the bus service, especially its reliability, in your area over the last two weeks. Write a letter to the manager of the bus company. In your letter • describe what the problems are • explain how these problems are affecting you • suggest what you would like the company to do.

Dear Sir, I am writing this letter to express my concern about the recent challenges with Espanol bus services over these past few weeks. My name is Lilian and I am a frequent customer of your bus services as I live in Chicago and commute to my office in New York with your bus. Nonetheless, I must commend you for your efforts in training the drivers because they drive safely and obey all the traffic rules as expected. Unexpectedly, for the first time last week, the bus did not come through at the Chicago bus station and many passengers were left stranded after waiting for several hours. Albeit, we assumed that there was probably a maintenance problem with the bus, hence, we had to order taxis and ubers to take us to work while some people returned home. This happened the next day, and has somehow become the norm these days. Sadly, some of the passengers do not bother to wait for the bus anymore and are now using alternative buses and modes of transport, not to mention that I can hardly keep up with the high charges of other modes of transport. What is worse still, is that they do not have arrival stations that are located close to my office. Therefore, I would be very thankful if you could look deeply into the reasons why the bus has suddenly become unreliable and rectify the problems. We would also appreciate that the an alternative bus is sent pending when the issues are resolved. I look forward to your positive reply. Yours Faithfully,
Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to express my concern about the recent challenges with
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Espanol
bus services over these past few weeks. My name is
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Lilian and
I am a frequent customer of your bus services as I
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live
in Chicago and commute to my office in New York with your bus. Nonetheless, I
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must
commend you for your efforts in training the drivers
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because
they drive
safely
and obey all the traffic
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rules
as
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expected
.

Unexpectedly
, for the
first
time last week, the bus did not
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come
through at the Chicago bus station and
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many
passengers were
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
left
stranded after waiting for several hours. Albeit, we assumed that there was
probably
a maintenance problem with the bus,
hence
, we had to order taxis and
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ubers
to take us to work while
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some
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people
returned home. This happened the
next
day, and has somehow become the norm these days.
Sadly
,
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some of the
passengers do not bother to wait for the bus anymore and are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
using alternative buses and modes of transport, not to mention that I can hardly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
up with the high charges of other modes of transport. What is worse
still
, is that they do not have arrival stations that
are located
close to my office.

Therefore
, I would be
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very
thankful if you could look
deeply
into the reasons why the bus has
suddenly
become unreliable and rectify the problems. We would
also
appreciate that
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the an
alternative bus is
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sent
pending when the issues
are resolved
.

I look forward to your
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positive
reply.

Yours
Faithfully
,

IELTS letter e have been some problems with the bus service, especially its reliability, in your area over the last two weeks. Write a letter to the manager of the bus company. In your letter • describe what the problems are • explain how these problems are affecting you • suggest what you would like the company to do.

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