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The following appeared in a letter to the editor of a Relannian newspaper Industry analysts report that the number of dairy farms in Relanna has increased by 25 percent over the last decade Also recent innovations in milking technology make it possible fo

The following appeared in a letter to the editor of a Relannian newspaper Industry analysts report that the number of dairy farms in Relanna has increased by 25 percent over the last decade Also recent innovations in milking technology make it possible fo PVnbd
In the letter to the editor, it is stated that the farmers are deliberately inflating the price of a carton of cream available at the local food market to make profits. To bolster the author's claim, he provides three specific shreds of evidence - the number of dairy farms in Relanna has increased by 25 percent, recent advances in the milking technology improves the efficiency by manifold and thereby less human intervention and lastly, the labors in Relanna are lower than it was ten years before. However, there could be alternative explanations that would possibly account for the high cost of cream. To begin with, the author claims that the number of dairy farms in Relanna has increased by 25 percent. However, though the increase may seem significant at first glance, the author does not provide any information about the actual number. Perhaps, the number of dairy farms in Relanna was less than 5 ten years ago and a 25 percent increase would make it 6 which implies that the number of dairy farms has almost remained static over the past decade. It is fallacious to blatantly consider that this increase would have any substantial effect on the price of the cartoon. Moreover, the author asserts that the labor cost have reduced in the past ten years and again, the author does not provide any information about how much were the costs reduced to or by what amount. Perhaps, the decrease in the labor costs is so inconsequential that the reduction does not have any impact on the costs incurred for making the cream. If either of the alternate explanations has merit, the author's argument will be significantly weekend. Moreover, the author does not explicitly mention if the local farmers are using advanced milking technology. It could very well be the case that the local farmers have not yet upgraded to the recent technology or they have been not using any technology to aid them in the first place. Since the farmers generally neither make hefty profits nor are they aware of better ROI(Return on Investment) by using advanced technology, they are generally disinclined towards promulgating the use of technology. And hence, though the author argues that newer milking technology reduces the dependency on manpower, perhaps, the farmers in Relanna have not yet adopted such technology which makes them incur the same costs as they did in the past. If this is the scenario in Relanna, the author's argument does not hold water. Finally, the author spuriously assumes that there are no factors other than what is mentioned in the argument that affect the price of the cream. Perhaps the farmers have been made aware of the blights of the cattle recently and they have to invest to keep their salubrious. Or maybe there has been a significant increase in the price of the fodder over the past years which precludes them from making the cream at low costs. If either of the cases turns out to be true, they would significantly weaken the author's claim that the local farmers are increasing the price of the cream to gain profits. To recapitulate, one can see that there are quite a few alternate explanations that would justify the high cost of the cream in the local food market and suggest contrary to the author's conclusion.
In the letter to the editor, it
is stated
that the
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farmers
are
deliberately
inflating the
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price
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cream
available at the
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local
food market to
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make
profits. To bolster the
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author's
claim, he provides three specific shreds of evidence
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-
the
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number
of
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dairy
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farms
in
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Relanna
has increased by 25 percent, recent advances in the milking
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technology
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improves
the efficiency by manifold and thereby less human intervention and
lastly
, the labors in
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Relanna
are lower than it was ten years
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cost
of cream.

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begin
with, the
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claims that the
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in
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Relanna
has increased by 25 percent.
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, though the
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may seem significant at
first
glance, the
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author
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does
not provide any information about the actual
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number
. Perhaps, the
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dairy
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Relanna
was less than 5 ten years ago and a 25 percent
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would
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make
it 6 which implies that the
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number
of
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dairy
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farms
has almost remained static over the
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past
decade. It is fallacious to
blatantly
consider that this
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increase
would have any substantial effect on the
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price
of the cartoon.
Moreover
, the
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author
asserts that the labor
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cost
have
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reduced
in the
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past
ten years and again, the
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not provide any information about how much were the
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reduced
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does
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incurred for making the
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cream
. If either of the alternate explanations has merit, the
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author's
argument will be
significantly
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Moreover
, the
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author
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not
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mention if the
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local
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farmers
are using advanced milking
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technology
. It could
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well be the case that the
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local
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farmers
have not
yet
upgraded to the recent
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technology or
they have been not using any
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technology
to aid them in the
first
place. Since the
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farmers
generally
neither
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hefty profits nor are they aware of better ROI(Return on Investment) by using advanced
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technology
, they are
generally
disinclined towards promulgating the
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use
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technology
. And
hence
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author
argues that newer milking
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technology
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reduces
the dependency on manpower, perhaps, the
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farmers
in
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Relanna
have not
yet
adopted such
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technology
which
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makes
them incur the same
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costs
as they did in the
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. If this is the scenario in
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Relanna
, the
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author's
argument
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not hold water.

Finally
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spuriously
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in the argument that affect the
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price
of the
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cream
. Perhaps the
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farmers
have
been made
aware of the blights of the cattle
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recently and
they
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have to
invest to
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keep
their salubrious. Or maybe there has been a significant
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of the fodder over the
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past
years which precludes them from making the
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cream
at low
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. If either of the cases turns out to be true, they would
significantly
weaken the
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author's
claim that the
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local
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farmers
are increasing the
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price
of the
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cream
to gain profits.

To recapitulate, one can
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that there are quite a few alternate explanations that would justify the high
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of the
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cream
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local
food market and suggest contrary to the
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author's
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IELTS letter The following appeared in a letter to the editor of a Relannian newspaper Industry analysts report that the number of dairy farms in Relanna has increased by 25 percent over the last decade Also recent innovations in milking technology make it possible fo

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