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You want to apply to a private college seeking admission for a bachelor degree. You are experiencing financial problems at the moment and can not get admitted to the college without some help. Write a letter to the Principal of the college explaining your situation and ask for information on scholarships or other means of financial help available.

You want to apply to a private college seeking admission for a bachelor degree. You are experiencing financial problems at the moment and can not get admitted to the college without some help. Write a letter to the Principal of the college explaining your situation and ask for information on scholarships or other means of financial help available. VB69J
Dear Sir, I am John Smith residing in Manitoba since last 5 years. I have completed my diploma in mechanical engineering and now I want to apply for the graduate program. The purpose of writing this letter to ask some information regards of the financial help. The University of Manitoba is one of the leading institutes in engineering field and therefore I have decided to apply in this for my further study. Currently, I am running of low cash and thus I am unable to pay the fees in advance because of two reasons. The foremost one is, during my undergraduate I was international student and therefore I had to pay almost 3 times higher fees than the now. In addition to this, I got my PR visa recently and get the full time job just before 3 months. Therefore, I am not capable for funding the collage to take the admission. It will be great if you could give me some information regarding scholarship program. Although, I have applied for two programs, I still need help from your side. Furthermore, I have heard about the student loan program initiated by collage authority last year. So if I can get the chance to apply for the same let me know. Look for a positive response from you side. Yours Sincerely, John Smith.
Dear Sir,

I am John Smith residing in Manitoba since last 5 years. I have completed my diploma in mechanical engineering and
now
I want to apply for the graduate
program
. The purpose of writing this letter to ask
some
information regards of the financial
help
.

The University of Manitoba is one of the leading institutes in engineering field and
therefore
I have decided to apply in this for my
further
study.
Currently
, I am running of low cash and
thus
I am unable to pay the fees in advance
because
of two reasons. The foremost one is, during my undergraduate I
was international
student and
therefore
I had to pay almost 3 times higher fees than the
now
.
In addition
to this, I
got
my PR visa recently and
get
the full time job
just
before
3 months.
Therefore
, I am not capable for funding the collage to take the admission. It will be great if you could give me
some
information regarding scholarship
program
. Although, I have applied for two
programs
, I
still
need
help
from your side.

Furthermore
, I have heard about the student loan
program
initiated by collage authority last year.
So
if I can
get
the chance to apply for the same
let
me know.

Look for a
positive
response from you side.

Yours
Sincerely
,

John Smith.
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IELTS letter You want to apply to a private college seeking admission for a bachelor degree. You are experiencing financial problems at the moment and can not get admitted to the college without some help. Write a letter to the Principal of the college explaining your situation and ask for information on scholarships or other means of financial help available.

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  American English
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222 words
6.5
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