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The company you work for has decided to close the cafeteri,as the staff is not using it much.You are not happy with the decision. Write a letter to the director

Dear Sir, I am writing this letter about the decion made by company to close the caffe shop because employees do not use it much. As many of the worker brings their coffee and tea along them, they do not use caffeteria as much. Moreover, the things in the shop are above the market price. Some of the workers can not able to bring refreshments with them so they was dependent on the canteen. The coffee served by them is also fresh
Dear Sir, I am writing this letter about the
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decion
made by
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company
to close the
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caffe
shop
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because
employees do not
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use
it much.

As
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many
of the worker brings their coffee and tea along them, they do not
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use
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caffeteria
as much.
Moreover
, the things in the shop are above the market price.

If the text is a generality, 'of the' is not necessary. Did you mean "some"?
Some of the
workers can not able to bring refreshments with them
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so
they
Use third-person plural verb with 'they': "are", "were".
was
dependent on the canteen. The coffee served by them is
also
Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraph
fresh

IELTS letter The company you work for has decided to close the cafeteri, as the staff is not using it much. You are not happy with the decision. Write a letter to the director

Letter
  American English
3 paragraphs
81 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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