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last tuesday you flew from new york to paris. when you arrived home, you discoverd that you had left your cabin bag on the plane. write a letter to the airline. you should explain where and when you lost your bag. what your bag looks like. what its contents were

I am writing this letter for concerning my bag, which was left during my last week Journey. As I travelled from New York to Paris, my flight number was N102 and seat number 14A I was in hurry because of emergency while landing, so I must have forgot to Pick up my bag from cabin. By appearance, It looks like hand bag Its Color is red with white Straps on it, on the middle of that bag there is one lock contains three digit numbers to unlock it. Also, there is a designer alphabet G on the that will left side of the bag, that will help you to identify my luggage with less effort. It would be very generous, if you help with my problem and find me my bag. Please, reply me as fast as you get the details about my cabin bag or anything Yours sincerely, Gunjan
I am writing this letter for concerning my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bag
, which was
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left
during my last week Journey. As I travelled from New York to Paris, my flight number was N102 and seat number 14A I was in hurry
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because
of emergency while landing,
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so
I
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must
have
Use past participle here: "forgotten".
forgot
to Pick up my
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bag
from cabin. By appearance, It looks like hand
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bag
Its Color
is red
with white Straps on it,
The usual prepositions to use when surrounded is "in" not "on". Did you mean "in the middle"?
on the middle
of that
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bag
there is one lock contains
It appears that a hyphen is missing.
three digit
numbers to unlock it.
Also
, there is a designer alphabet G on the that will
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left
side of the
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bag
, that will
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help
you to identify my luggage with less effort.

It would be
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very
generous, if you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
with my problem and find me my
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bag
.
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Please
, reply me as
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fast
as you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
details
about my cabin
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bag
or anything

Yours
sincerely
,

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Gunjan

IELTS letter last tuesday you flew from new york to paris. when you arrived home, you discoverd that you had left your cabin bag on the plane. write a letter to the airline. you should explain where and when you lost your bag. what your bag looks like. what its contents were

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  American English
4 paragraphs
149 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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4.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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