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Thank you for visit my birthday

Thank you for visit my birthday 5a8AN
Dear my friend. I have written this letter to you for express my sincere thanks. I was my birthday. I was happy. When I woke up in the morning, my family congrutulated me. And I waa happy from it. But I was expecting my gift from someone at that time. Suddenly, I was thrilled and excited when you came to my home. Then you were giving your gift to me, I was very happy. In addition, I think that your gift was the best within gifts. Because I am using from this gift now a days. Your gift, which is a laptop is useful and interesting for me. How considerate and wonderful of you to remember my birthday. I will cherish this memory forever. This letter is to thank you for attention. I am writing these few lines to express my sincere thanks. I appreciate very much for your attention. Please accept my thanks. From Your dear Lucky.
Dear my friend.

I have written this letter to you for express my sincere thanks.

I was my birthday.
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I
was happy. When I woke up in the morning, my family
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congrutulated
me. And I
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waa
happy from it.
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But
I was expecting my
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gift
from someone at that time.
Suddenly
, I
was thrilled
and excited when you came to my home. Then you were giving your
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gift
to me, I was
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very
happy.

In addition
, I
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think
that your
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gift
was the best within
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gifts
.
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Because
I am using from this
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gift
Did you mean "nowadays"?
now a days
. Your
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gift
, which is a laptop is useful and interesting for me. How considerate and wonderful of you to remember my birthday. I will cherish this memory forever.

This letter is to thank you for attention. I am writing these few lines to express my sincere thanks. I appreciate
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very
much for your attention.

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Please
accept my thanks.

From

Your dear Lucky.
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IELTS letter Thank you for visit my birthday

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  American English
7 paragraphs
158 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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