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tell your manager why you want to speng six months in the head office in Canada.

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Dear Mr. Smith, I am writing to express my interest in provisional work in the Canadian headquarters for a period of six months at least. Please let me elaborate on this. The main reason for requesting this is that new cybersecurity software will be installed in the main branch in Ottawa to protect against hackers’ security breaches. Therefore, mastering this program in order to deploy it in our organization will take only six months. I have discussed this with HR, and they said that I should complete half of the job online and the rest with another teammate. My colleague Lee has kindly agreed to cover any appointments that cannot be rescheduled. Accordingly, I would greatly appreciate it if you could put my request to the management and make the necessary arrangements regarding the visa as well as the accommodation there. Please do not hesitate to contact me if you wish to discuss this further. Yours sincerely, Kyrillos Gamal
Dear Mr. Smith,

I am writing to express my interest in provisional work in the Canadian headquarters for a period of six months at least.
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Please
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let
me elaborate on this.

The main reason for requesting this is that new cybersecurity software will
be installed
in the main branch in Ottawa to protect against hackers’ security breaches.
Therefore
, mastering this program in order to deploy it in our organization will take
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
six months.

I have discussed this with HR, and they said that I should complete half of the job online and the rest with another teammate. My colleague Lee has kindly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agreed
to cover any appointments that cannot
be rescheduled
.

Accordingly
, I would
greatly
appreciate it if you could put my request to the management and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
the necessary arrangements regarding the visa
as well
as the accommodation there.

This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Please
do not hesitate to contact me if you wish to discuss this
further
.

Yours
sincerely
,

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Kyrillos
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Gamal
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IELTS letter tell your manager why you want to speng six months in the head office in Canada.

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  American English
8 paragraphs
158 words
6.0
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