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Dear missI am writing to request about taking cooking lessons with you. I read the magazine about you and saw your advertisement in this week's newspaper and I believe that you are just the person I am seeking. I think that it will found a space in your timetable for me. My cause of wanting to learn cooking is because cooking is ought to in my life. If I do not learn it, I will be in a difficulty. Also, I really like cook different dishes and cakes. I would be grateful if you could let me know what availability you have. Three times a week would be ideal if that is possible. I study in the evenings, so daytime would be fine. Please, could you also tell me what you cost for tuition and how long each lesson would last? I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours faithfully, Sarah
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writing to request about taking cooking lessons with you. I read the magazine about you and
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cooking is ought to in my life. If I do not learn it, I will be in a difficulty.
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dishes and cakes. I would be grateful if you could
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me know what availability you have. Three times a week would be ideal if
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possible. I study in the evenings,
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me what you cost for tuition and how long each lesson would last? I look forward to hearing from you
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. Yours
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Sarah
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IELTS letter Taking cooking lessons with tutor

Letter
  American English
1 paragraphs
151 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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