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Buying a laptop in the store

Buying a laptop in the store d3rNE
Dear Sir, I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with the laptop which I purchased your store last week. I am programmar, that is why I need a computer. If I do not have a computer, I shall work. Therefore, I bought the laptop in your store. Unfortunately, it does not work nice. It has not all the functions described the manual. Moreover, it was made in China. I asked your servants that a laptop was made in Southern Korea. Although, your company is big and there are a lot of various technology, their qualification is not good. I trust you will take my complaint seriously, and make every efford to improve your company in the future. I ask you this issue to settle and I would like give me a new one. I look forward to hearing from you at your earliest convience. Your faithfully, Dora
Dear Sir, I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with the laptop which I
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purchased
your store last week. I am
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programmar
,
that is
why I need a computer. If I do not have a computer, I shall work.
Therefore
, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bought
the laptop in your store. Unfortunately, it does not work nice. It has not all the functions
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
described
the manual.
Moreover
, it
was made
in China. I asked your servants that a laptop
was made
in Southern Korea. Although, your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
is
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big
and there are
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a lot of
various technology, their qualification is not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
. I trust you will take my complaint
seriously
, and
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make
every
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efford
to
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improve
your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
in the future. I ask you this issue to settle and I would like give me a new one.
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I
look forward to hearing from you at your earliest
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convience
.
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Your
faithfully
,
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Dora
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IELTS letter Buying a laptop in the store

Letter
  American English
1 paragraphs
146 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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