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Some people think that governments should spend more money on sports facilities for top athletes. others argue that this money should be spent for sports facilities for ordinary people. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

Some people think that governments should spend more money on sports facilities for top athletes. others argue that this money should be spent for sports facilities for ordinary people. glKD
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing in the hope that you can help me with a problem regarding a camera that I recently bought. On 27 June, I purchased a Canon DSLR camera from the 'Heinemann Duty Free' store at Frankfurt Airport on my way from Moscow to Toronto. The camera cost $799 and I paid for it on my Visa credit card. When I arrived at my hotel in Toronto almost 24 hours later I discovered, to my horror, that the box which contained the camera did not include the battery charger. The space in the box for the charger was empty. I am now in Toronto and I am not returning to Frankfurt, so I need to get the missing parts here. As you are the representative of the company in this country I would be grateful if you could arrange for the parts to be sent to me. I attach a copy of the receipt with this letter for your information. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Ulrich Nielsen
Dear Sir or Madam,

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help
me with a problem regarding a
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camera
that I recently
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bought
.

On 27 June, I
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purchased
a Canon DSLR
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camera
from the '
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Heinemann
Duty Free' store at Frankfurt Airport on my way from Moscow to Toronto. The
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
camera
cost $799 and I paid for it on my Visa credit card.

When I arrived at my hotel in Toronto almost 24 hours later I discovered, to my horror, that the box which contained the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
camera
did not include the battery charger. The space in the box for the charger was empty.

I am
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now
in
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Toronto and
I am not returning to Frankfurt,
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so
I need to
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get
the missing parts here. As you are the representative of the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
in this country I would be grateful if you could arrange for the parts to be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sent
to me. I attach a copy of the receipt with this letter for your information.

I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours
faithfully
,

Ulrich Nielsen
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IELTS letter Some people think that governments should spend more money on sports facilities for top athletes. others argue that this money should be spent for sports facilities for ordinary people.

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