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Some people believe that technology has made man more social. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Dear Sir or Madam, My name is Tahjib, a regular passenger of your reputed bus for a long time. I am writing to let you know that I, along with other passengers of the route-02 of your bus company, have been facing severe difficulties related to the service of the bus. I hope you will consider our situation favorably. Let me explain our situation. The trouble started about a month ago when the previous driver of the route retired from driving after 25 years of continuous driving in this route. He was a calm and cool person and always maintain discipline, consequently, before that everything was fine. As the newly appointed driver is inexperienced and novice, He is not well known to the road and stoppage of the route. Moreover, he appears to be a reckless driver because he frequently tries to overtake other vehicles, and at the same time he does not even notice speed breakers. Though he is a speedy driver, he often came to the stoppage after 10-15 minutes after the scheduled time. While arriving at the stoppage late, he also tries to argue with the passengers regularly. He is not only arrogant but also has some behavioral issues. Because of irregular and indiscipline behavior of the new driver, we could not able to reach the office in time as route no-02 has only a single bus. This is not only my situation, this is the picture of all regular passengers of this route. Would you kindly change the driver in route no 2? We will be grateful to you if you appointed an experience, well-disciplined, and well-mannered driver in our daily commuter. As long as the driver has some courtesy he will not become the cause of any inconvenience to the passengers. Thank you for your kind consideration. Yours faithfully, Tahjib
Dear Sir or Madam,

My name is
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, a regular
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passenger
of your reputed bus for a long
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time
. I am writing to
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passengers
of the
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route-02
of your bus
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company
, have been facing severe difficulties related to the service of the bus. I hope you will consider our situation
favorably
.

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me
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our situation. The trouble
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started
about a month ago when the previous
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driver
of the
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route
retired from driving after 25 years of continuous driving in this
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route
. He was a calm and cool person and always maintain discipline,
consequently
,
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before
that everything was fine. As the
newly
appointed
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driver
is inexperienced
and novice, He is not well known to the road and stoppage of the
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route
.
Moreover
, he appears to be a reckless
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driver
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because
he
frequently
tries to overtake other vehicles, and at the same
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time
he does not even notice speed breakers. Though he is a speedy
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driver
, he
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often
came to the stoppage after 10-15 minutes after the scheduled
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time
. While arriving at the stoppage late, he
also
tries to argue with the
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passengers
regularly
. He is not
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only
arrogant
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also
has
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some
behavioral issues.

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of irregular and indiscipline behavior of the new
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driver
, we could not able to reach the office in
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time
as
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route
no-02 has
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only
a single bus. This is not
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my situation, this is the picture of all regular
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passengers
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change
the
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driver
in
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no 2? We will be grateful to you if you appointed an experience, well-disciplined, and well-mannered
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driver
in our daily commuter.
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long as the
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has
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some
courtesy he will not become the cause of any inconvenience to the passengers.

Thank you for your kind consideration.

Yours
faithfully
,

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IELTS letter Some people believe that technology has made man more social. with this opinion?

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