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Some people believe that mobile phone conversations should be banned in crowded and social places. Others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some people believe that mobile phone conversations should be banned in crowded and social places. Others disagree. Q87wy
Following the cell phone revolution, almost every Tom, Dick, and Harry owns a mobile phone. It has reshaped the way we communicate and has occupied an indispensable part of our lives. But some people think that we should avoid using mobile phones in public places. Others feel that it is much ado about nothing. I agree with the former view. In the forthcoming paragraphs, I shall discuss both ideas and explain which is beneficial to society. Primarily, cell phones are devices that emit electromagnetic radiation. According to the traffic laws, these devices could cause an explosion of fire in petrol bunks if not switched off. Secondly, they are chief sources of distraction. There have been many accidents reported due to talking over mobile phones while driving. If used by doctors or nurses in hospitals, it may cost the patient’s life. In public places like libraries, cell phone tunes disturb the people reading books. In places of religious worship, people talking over cell phones in loud voices are a hindrance to people praying sincerely. People who talk or listen to music on cell phones while walking on roads are more prone to accidents. On the other hand, defendants of mobile phone use in public places argue that mobile phones are the best way to convey an emergency message. For instance, an ailing mother could contact her son, driving a car and asking him to admit her to a hospital. In tourist spots, smartphones come handy to capture pictures and videos. Moreover, they have electronic mailing facilities, which are helpful in many ways. For example, an office-goer who is on his way to the office and suddenly gets a message that his wife is admitted into the hospital can email his boss about his leave. To recapitulate, there are both merits and demerits in using cell phones in public places. Though cell phones are useful in conveying information, there are an increasing number of road accidents reported due to the use of cell phones in public areas. So it is without a doubt that they should be banned in public places.
Following the
cell
phone
revolution, almost every Tom, Dick, and Harry
owns
a mobile
phone
. It has reshaped the way we communicate and has occupied an indispensable part of our
lives
.
But
some
people
think
that we should avoid using mobile
phones
in
public
places
. Others feel that it is much ado about nothing. I
agree
with the former view. In the forthcoming paragraphs, I shall discuss both
ideas
and
explain
which is beneficial to society.

Primarily
,
cell
phones
are devices that emit electromagnetic radiation. According to the traffic laws, these devices could cause an explosion of fire in petrol bunks if not switched off.
Secondly
, they are chief sources of distraction. There have been
many
accidents reported due to talking over mobile
phones
while driving. If
used
by doctors or nurses in hospitals, it may cost the patient’s life. In
public
places
like libraries,
cell
phone
tunes disturb the
people
reading books. In
places
of religious worship,
people
talking over
cell
phones
in loud voices are a hindrance to
people
praying
sincerely
.
People
who talk or listen to music on
cell
phones
while walking on roads are more prone to accidents.

On the other hand
, defendants of mobile
phone
use
in
public
places
argue that mobile
phones
are the best way to convey an emergency message.
For instance
, an ailing mother could contact her son, driving a car and asking him to admit her to a hospital. In tourist spots, smartphones
come
handy to capture pictures and videos.
Moreover
, they have electronic mailing facilities, which are helpful in
many
ways.
For example
, an office-goer who is on his way to the office and
suddenly
gets
a message that his wife
is admitted
into the hospital can email his boss about his
leave
. To recapitulate, there are both merits and demerits in using
cell
phones
in
public
places
. Though
cell
phones
are useful in conveying information, there are an increasing number of road accidents reported due to the
use
of
cell
phones
in
public
areas.
So
it is without a doubt that they should
be banned
in
public
places
.
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IELTS letter Some people believe that mobile phone conversations should be banned in crowded and social places. Others disagree.

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  American English
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349 words
6.0
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