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Since the information about culture is available on the internet so people Good that museums are not needed to what extent do you agree or disagree?

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History plays crucial role in every person’s life. Momentarily, with the advancement of technology, people can easily grab the knowledge with the help of internet, and they mean neglect to go in museums. Some people argue that museums are not needed whilst, I disagree with this statement. In the upcoming paragraphs, I will elucidate this concept before reaching an appropriate conclusion. To embark with, due to development of technology, many gadgets are available such as smartphone. Some of people has keen interest to get knowledge about history and they want to know more about history and culture. With the help of museum people can see different type of comedies that related to freedom fighter which sacrifice their precious life just for the sake of mankind. Nowadays, in the search engine such as Google, much information are available but sometimes, the web browser may not show the information clearly. Therefore, in that case, museum is helpful for everyone. In the upcoming years, if we museum would be closed then new generation would not grab any knowledge. Moreover, mostly people use museum just for commercial basis because in the museum every person show their talent because museum is crowded place. To cite an example, in India there are different type of museums is available such as Bhagat Singh Museum, in that museum the old clothes and books are kept there which represents the Sikh religion and also culture. In this recent time, the museum is necessary for all individual due to the fact, if someone go to explore the museum then they see various things and capture the picture in their mobile phone merely because to remember the History and to see the lifestyle of freedom fighters. On the contrary, in this time, most of the information is obtainable in the internet so that is the reason they do not prefer to go museum because in internet not only information is available but also convenient to see. Sometimes, individual do not have any knowledge about history then web browser is most helpful for grab the knowledge about different culture. To epitome, every nation has their own history if someone wants to get information about other culture than internet is helpful for each and every age group. To recapitulate, I personally believe that internet and Museum both are helpful for mankind. They has both negative and positive impact on the society. The internet and Museum contain basket full of knowledge which assist to enhance the knowledge of human being.
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History
plays crucial role in every person’s life.
Momentarily
, with the advancement of technology,
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people
can
easily
grab the
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knowledge
with the
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help
of internet, and they mean neglect to go in
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museums
.
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Some
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people
argue that
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museums
are not needed whilst, I disagree with this statement. In the upcoming paragraphs, I will elucidate this concept
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before
reaching an appropriate conclusion.

To embark with, due to development of technology,
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many
gadgets are
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available
such as smartphone.
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of
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people
has keen interest to
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get
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knowledge
about
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history and
they want to know more about
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history
and
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culture
. With the
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help
of
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museum
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people
can
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different
type of comedies that related to freedom fighter which sacrifice their precious life
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for the sake of mankind. Nowadays, in the search engine such as Google, much
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information
are
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available
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sometimes
, the web browser may not
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clearly
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in that case
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museum
is
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helpful
for everyone. In the upcoming years, if we
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museum
would
be closed
then new generation would not grab any
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knowledge
.
Moreover
,
mostly
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people
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use
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museum
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just
for commercial basis
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because
in the
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museum
every person
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show
their talent
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because
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museum
is crowded
place. To cite an example, in India there are
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different
type of
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museums
is
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available
such as
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Bhagat
Singh
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Museum
, in that
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museum
the
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old
clothes and books are
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kept
there which represents the Sikh religion and
also
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culture
. In this recent time, the
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museum
is necessary for all individual due to the fact, if someone
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go
to explore the
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museum
then they
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see
various things and capture the picture in their mobile phone
merely
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because
to remember the
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History
and to
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see
the lifestyle of freedom fighters.

On the contrary
, in this time, most of the
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information
is obtainable
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in the internet
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so
that is
the reason they do not prefer to go
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museum
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in internet not
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see
.
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, individual do not have any
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about
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history
then web browser is most
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helpful
for grab the
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about
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culture
. To epitome, every nation has their
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own
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history
if someone wants to
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get
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information
about other
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culture
than internet is
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helpful
for each and every age group.

To recapitulate, I
personally
believe that internet and
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Museum
both are
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helpful
for mankind. They
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both
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and
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positive
impact on the society. The internet and
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Museum
contain basket full of
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knowledge
which assist to enhance the
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knowledge
of human being.
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IELTS letter Since the information about culture is available on the internet so people Good that museums are not needed

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