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Should wealthy nations be required to share their wealth among poorer nations by providing such things as food and education? Or is it the responsibility of the governments of poorer nations to look after their citizens themselves?

Should wealthy nations be required to share their wealth among poorer nations by providing such things as food and education? Or is it the responsibility of the governments of poorer nations to look after their citizens themselves? mKgO
Dear Sir and Madame: My name is An Huynh and I would like to bring your attention to an admission request for my son, Dang Huynh, at the prestigous William High School. Due to my job’s committment, I am moving to our town in 6 months and after our intensive research, I would like to ask if you would kindly accept my son to be one of your year 11 students. Dang is a bright young man with a great talent for languages. Being nourished in Toronto, one of the world’s most diverse cities, he can speak English, French, and Vietnamese which is my mother tounge. In addition, he has participated the Advance Maths Club and competed in Ontario’s annual Maths Conference since he started high school. Meanwhile, he also co-found the Chinese club at his current school last year which attracted about 20 members each semester. Although being extremely busy with his classes and extra advanced academic clubs, Dang still maintains his standard as a straight-A student. Dang enjoys moderate-size sports such as running, swimming and badminton, and he has been a long lasting member in all of these clubs since Year 7. He also wishes to continue to participate in your Chinese club to improve his Chinese. As your school has a greater variety of facitilies, especially many more activities, Dang is alo keen on joining the drums club to enhance his taste in music. I sincerely wish you can consider my application for his enrollment. I believe the William High School will be an important remark for Dang future success. Kind regards, Thien An Huynh
Dear Sir and Madame:

My name is An
Huynh
and I would like to bring your attention to an admission request for my son, Dang
Huynh
, at the
prestigous
William High
School
. Due to my job’s
committment
, I am moving to our town in 6 months and after our intensive research, I would like to ask if you would kindly accept my son to be one of your year 11 students.

Dang is a bright young
man
with a great talent for languages.
Being nourished
in Toronto, one of the world’s most diverse cities, he can speak English, French, and Vietnamese which is my mother
tounge
.
In addition
, he has participated the Advance
Maths
Club
and competed in Ontario’s annual
Maths
Conference since he
started
high
school
. Meanwhile, he
also
co-found the Chinese
club
at his
current
school
last year which attracted about 20 members each semester. Although being
extremely
busy with his classes and extra advanced academic
clubs
, Dang
still
maintains his standard as a straight-A student.

Dang enjoys moderate-size sports such as running, swimming and badminton, and he has been a
long lasting
member in all of these
clubs
since Year 7. He
also
wishes to continue to participate in your Chinese
club
to
improve
his Chinese. As your
school
has a greater variety of
facitilies
,
especially
many
more activities, Dang is
alo
keen on joining the drums
club
to enhance his taste in music.

I
sincerely
wish you can consider my application for his enrollment. I believe the William High
School
will be an
important
remark for Dang future success.

Kind regards,

Thien
An
Huynh
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IELTS letter Should wealthy nations be required to share their wealth among poorer nations by providing such things as food and education? Or is it the responsibility of the governments of poorer nations to look after their citizens themselves?

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
267 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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