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You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: give details of your study plans explain why you want to get a part-time job suggest how your friend could help you find a job

You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: give details of your study plans explain why you want to get a part-time job suggest how your friend could help you find a job N1EW
Hello Amit, I am very greatful to let you know that, I got an addmission in centennial college. I am very exited to get this opportunity because its my dream to do Project Mangement from Canadian college. The course in which I enrolled has 2 semesters and, I will complete this program in eight months. There are so many planings comes in mind, one of them to do a part time job while doing course. As you are very well aware about my financial conditions and a part time job will act as like helping hand for me. Apart from that, part time job will definitely helps to kill my leisure time, because my schedule of course will be for three days in week. I’ld like to ask you a favour for help me out with job. Give me some information regarding the area where ample of jobs city has. Also, tell me about their requirements, like are they looking for any certifications from employees. Waiting for your response. Your Lovingly Lovedeep Singh
Hello Amit,

I am
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very
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greatful
to
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let
you know that, I
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got
an
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addmission
in centennial college. I am
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very
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exited
to
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get
this opportunity
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because
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its
my dream to do Project
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Mangement
from Canadian college. The course in which I enrolled has 2 semesters and, I will complete this program in eight months.

There are
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so
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many
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planings
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comes
in mind, one of them to do a part
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time
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job
while doing course. As you are
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very
well aware about my financial conditions and a part
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time
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job
will act as like helping hand for me. Apart from that, part
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time
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job
will definitely
The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: "help"
helps
to kill my leisure
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time
,
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because
my schedule
of course
will be for three days in week.

I’
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ld
like to ask you a
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favour
for
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help
me out with
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job
. Give me
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some
information regarding the area where ample of
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jobs
city has.
Also
,
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tell
me about their requirements, like are they looking for any certifications from employees.

Waiting for your response.

Your
Lovingly


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Lovedeep
Singh

IELTS letter You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: give details of your study plans explain why you want to get a part-time job suggest how your friend could help you find a job

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  American English
6 paragraphs
172 words
5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
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    Present relevant ideas
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