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Roommate behavior 1. what happened 2. what issue 3. what to do

Roommate behavior 1. what happened 2. what issue 3. what to do 1bMQN
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing this letter to express my discontent and discomfort, specially, due to my roommate irrational behavior. I request you to provide me with a different room for the next semester. I am living in the room 204 on the second floor of the resident hall. Ever since I moved in the room, I had a hard time concentrating. My roommate and his friends hold parties several times a month with loud music. I am not sure if such parties are allowed without proper permission. In addition, he always end up making the room dirty and does not organize his things. Besides, he borrows my things without permission and never return them. Once, took a library book and lost it, which I needed to pay the fine. I cannot take this situation any more as I cannot with stand with his behavior. As my studies are being affected, it is solely my responsibility to realize now and move to a different room and I would be grateful if you arrange a separate room preferably for the subsequent term. Thank you in advance and I hope to hear from you at the earliest. Yours faithfully,
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter to express my discontent and discomfort,
specially
, due to my roommate irrational behavior. I request you to provide me with a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
room
for the
next
semester.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
am living in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
room
204 on the second floor of the resident hall. Ever since I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
moved
in the
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room
, I had a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
time concentrating. My roommate and his friends hold parties several times a month with loud music. I am not sure if such parties are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
allowed
without proper permission.
In addition
, he always
The pronoun 'he' is usually used with a third-person or a past tense verb: "ends", "ended".
end
up making the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
room
dirty and does not organize his things.

Besides
, he borrows my things without permission and never return them. Once, took a library book and lost it, which I needed to pay the fine. I cannot take this situation
Did you mean the adverb "anymore"?
any more
Comparison requires "than", not 'then' nor 'as'.
as
I cannot with stand with his behavior.

As my studies are being
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
affected
, it is
solely
my responsibility to realize
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
move
to a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
room
and I would be grateful if you arrange a separate
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
room
preferably
for the subsequent term.

Thank you in advance and I hope to hear from you at the earliest.

Yours
faithfully
,
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IELTS letter Roommate behavior 1. what happened 2. what issue 3. what to do

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
199 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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