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request letter to the manager to transfer the membership

request letter to the manager to transfer the membership EwVBB

Dear sir, I am Jithin V (Membership number: CVTRVIP5LB270814) one of the Members of Country Club. I am writing this letter to you to transfer my club membership to another person. As per the telephonic conversation with Trivandrum manger Mr………………………………………. . on 20/08/2021, we decide to transfer our membership to another person. Actually, from the beginning onwards your services are too bad and we report this to the head office of country club in Hyderabad. But we don’t get any reply from anyone. Moreover, the club is failing to keep the promises from the first. As a result, we are ready to transfer our membership to someone else. So please do the necessary action and refund my full payment (RS 35000) as soon as possible.

Dear sir,

I am Possible spelling mistake found.Within
Jithin
 V You use this word too often, consider replacing it withenrollmentparticipation
(Membership
 number: CVTRVIP5LB270814) one of the Members of Country You use this word too often, consider replacing it withbusinessstaff
Club
. I am writing this letter to you to transfer my You use this word too often, consider replacing it withbusinessstaff
club
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withenrollmentparticipation
membership
 to another person. “As” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
As
 per the telephonic conversation with Trivandrum manger Mr………………………………………. Don't put a space before the full stop.
.
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letterOn
on
 20/08/2021, we decide to transfer our You use this word too often, consider replacing it withenrollmentparticipation
membership
 to another person.

Actually, from the beginning onwards your services are too Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).bad, and
bad and
 we report this to the head office of country You use this word too often, consider replacing it withbusinessstaff
club
 in Hyderabad. This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
But
 we don’t This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquire
get
 any reply from anyone. Moreover
, the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withbusinessstaff
club
 is failing to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :retain
keep
 the promises from the first
. As a result
, we are ready to transfer our You use this word too often, consider replacing it withenrollmentparticipation
membership
 to someone else.

This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
So
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :satisfy
please
 do the necessary action and refund my full payment (RS 35000) as This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:in the near future
soon
 as possible. 