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Before flying to Wellington, the capital of New Zealand, you book a helicopter flight over the city. However, when you get there, you are told that the flight has been cancelled because of poor weather conditions, and you won’t get your money back. Not only that, but you took a four-hour bus journey to get to the heliport, and the company didn’t contact you

Before flying to Wellington, the capital of New Zealand, you book a helicopter flight over the city. However, when you get there, you are told that the flight has been cancelled because of poor weather conditions, and you won’t get your money back. Not only that, but you took a four-hour bus journey to get to the heliport, and the company didn’t contact you pKREy
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to complain about my helicoptering flights over the city 25 March. Before flying to Wellington the capital of New Zealand i booked a halicopter flight over the city. However when i arrived the receptionist maintained that the flight had been cancelled because of poor weather conditions and they won't get my money back. Therefore it took four- hour bus journey to get to the halicopter. Furthermore your employee was not warned me about cancellation, or put some information on their website. There was no apology at any point. I feel strongly that i deserve some compensation for this deeply unsatisfactory journey. Firstly, i suggest that your company will immediately approve the money back, as there are clearly problems. Second your company should provided a car to drive to heliport. Finally, it would be better if your staff will warn their customers about cancellation, so that other guests are not inconvenience as i was. I look forward to hearing from you. Your faithfully. Aurora.
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to complain about my helicoptering flights over the city 25 March.
“Before” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Before
flying to Wellington the capital of New Zealand
Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.
i
booked a
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halicopter
flight over the city.
Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
However
when
Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.
i
arrived the receptionist maintained that the flight had
been cancelled
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of poor weather
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
conditions and
they won't
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
my money back.
Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Therefore
it took four- hour bus journey to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
to the
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halicopter
.
Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Furthermore
your employee was not warned me about cancellation, or put
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
information on their website. There was no apology at any point. I feel
strongly
that
Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.
i
deserve
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
compensation for this
deeply
unsatisfactory journey.
Firstly
,
Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.
i
suggest that your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
will immediately approve the money back, as there are
clearly
problems. Second your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
should
The verb 'should' requires the base form of the verb: "provide"
provided
a car to drive to heliport.
Finally
, it would be better if your staff will warn their customers about cancellation,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that other guests are not inconvenience as
Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.
i
was. I look forward to hearing from you. Your
faithfully
. Aurora.
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IELTS letter Before flying to Wellington, the capital of New Zealand, you book a helicopter flight over the city. However, when you get there, you are told that the flight has been cancelled because of poor weather conditions, and you won’t get your money back. Not only that, but you took a four-hour bus journey to get to the heliport, and the company didn’t contact you

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5.5
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