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complain about my experience at campsite

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Dear Sir or Madam, I'm writing to complain about our experience at your campsite. There was a lot of trash around the campsite make it was dingy and having an unpleasant smell. Therefore we wasted all morning because of it. Moreover, the rental camping gears were poor. The tent we rented was not very clean, so we asked to change to a new one but could not, and the manager did not give us even a reason. I feel extremely dissatisfied with your services. Firstly, I suggest that you should clear the campsite frequently and set more bins around there. Secondly, wash your rental gear cleanly as soon as they are returned. I trust the situation will improve and I look forward to hearing from you. yours faithfully,
Dear Sir or Madam,

I'm writing to complain about our experience at your campsite.

There was
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a lot of
trash around the campsite
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make
it was dingy and having an unpleasant smell.
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Therefore
we wasted all morning
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because
of it.

Moreover
, the rental camping gears were poor. The tent we rented was not
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very
clean,
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so
we asked to
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change
to a new one
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but
could not, and the manager did not give us even a reason.

I feel
extremely
dissatisfied with your services.
Firstly
, I suggest that you should
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clear
the campsite
frequently
and set more bins around there.
Secondly
, wash your rental gear
cleanly
as
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soon
as they
are returned
.

I trust the situation will
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improve
and I look forward to hearing from you.

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yours
faithfully
,
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IELTS letter complain about my experience at campsite

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  American English
7 paragraphs
128 words
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.5
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