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Write a letter to the Accommodation Officer at the college and ask for a new room next term. You would prefer a single room. Explain your reasons.

Write a letter to the Accommodation Officer at the college and ask for a new room next term. You would prefer a single room. Explain your reasons. 9wLoj
Dear Accommodation Officer, I am writing to you, due to the fact I have been having troubles with my roommate who has been inviting friends and having parties most of the time, as far as I concern, there are rules every student must follow but it is not the case. This sort of situations are increasing their frequency and I can not study even maintain the concentration to finish my duties. Furthermore, there are personal things that they took without my permission, for instance, my books, when I schedule in advance to study some material I could not because some of them took from my desk. For these reasons, I would like to consider to arrange a single room for me, as you know this stage of life can have rebounds to my career. I hope you drill down into my situation to place me into another building which encourage me with better environment to concentrate properly.
Dear Accommodation Officer,

I am writing to you, due to the fact I have been having troubles with my roommate who has been inviting friends and having parties most of the time, as far as I concern, there are
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every student
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follow
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it is not the case. This sort of situations
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are
increasing their frequency and I can not study even maintain the concentration to finish my duties.

Furthermore
, there are personal things that they took without my permission,
for instance
, my books, when I schedule in advance to study
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some
material I could not
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because
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some
of them took from my desk. For these reasons, I would like to
The verb 'consider' is used with the gerund form: "consider arranging".
consider to arrange
a single room for me, as you know this stage of life can have rebounds to my career.

I hope you drill down into my situation to place me into another building which encourage me with better environment to concentrate
properly
.

IELTS letter Write a letter to the Accommodation Officer at the college and ask for a new room next term. You would prefer a single room. Explain your reasons.

Letter
  American English
4 paragraphs
157 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
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