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paternity leave application to boss

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I am writing this request letter, I’m planning to take paternity leave from 25. 09. 2021 to 09. 10. 2021. Also, happy to apprise you that my wife Shefali and I, blessed with Baby Boy on 20. 09. 2021. The paternity leave as per company policy is for 15 days including intervening and public holiday during the period of paternity leave availed and allowed in single spell. This is essential time for me as the father to bolster up my family, and concentrate on providing to my new born baby with necessary care and support. In addition, my wife also required my presence for her moral support. To obviate from delaying of few crucial assignments, in my absence, Mr. Karthik Sharma will be taken care of pivotal assignment related to Corporate planning & Economic studies, albeit, for inventory related data of Southern Region stocks from Cameron, Houston USA is remain with me, as it is crucial data of organization and to be kept confidential, thereof, I shall be available for discussion over phone. I request you may kindly approve my paternity leave for aforementioned dates; your earliest response in this regard is highly solicited.
I am writing this request letter, I’m planning to take
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from 25. 09. 2021 to 09. 10. 2021.
Also
, happy to apprise you that my wife
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Shefali
and I, blessed with Baby Boy on 20. 09. 2021.

The
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paternity
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as per
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company
policy is for 15 days including intervening and public holiday during the period of
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paternity
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availed and
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allowed
in single spell. This is essential time for me as the father to bolster up my family, and concentrate on providing to my new born baby with necessary care and support.
In addition
, my wife
also
required my presence for her moral support.

To obviate from delaying of few crucial assignments, in my absence, Mr.
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Karthik
Sharma will
be taken
care of pivotal assignment related to Corporate planning & Economic studies, albeit, for inventory related data of Southern Region stocks from Cameron, Houston USA is
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remain
with me, as it is crucial data of organization and to be
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kept
confidential, thereof, I shall be available for discussion over phone.

I request you may kindly approve my
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paternity
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leave
for aforementioned dates; your earliest response in this regard is
highly
solicited.
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IELTS letter paternity leave application to boss

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  American English
4 paragraphs
194 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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