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Part 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this part. Write at least 150 words. You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter describe the situation explain your problems and why it is difficult to work say what kind of accommodation you would prefer You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

Part 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this part. You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter describe the situation explain your problems and why it is difficult to work say what kind of accommodation you would prefer You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam, P1xw
Dear Sir, Hope you are doing well. I am living on the college premises where I share a room with the other student. However, there are various issues with this sort of arrangement and it seems difficult for me to work. The problems which I am facing right now with this kind of arrangement are loudness, cleanliness and sharing bed. Another student is too loud, does not maintain cleanliness in room and washroom. Despite of telling him, there are no improvements so far. He is keep on doing the same things over and over. As a result, my sleep is deprived because of sharing bed with him. I have not been able to concentrate on my studies properly. It is a request from my side to please help me in order to find the another accommodation. I would prefer a single bedroom with an attached washroom in a peaceful environment. Best, Jason
Dear Sir,

Hope you are doing well. I am living on the college premises where I share a room with the other student.
However
, there are various issues with this sort of arrangement and it seems difficult for me to work.

The problems which I am facing right
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
with this kind of arrangement are loudness, cleanliness and sharing bed. Another student is too loud, does not maintain cleanliness in room and washroom.
Did you mean "Despite" (or, alternatively, 'in spite of')?
Despite of
telling him, there are no improvements
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
far. He is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
on doing the same things over and over.
As a result
, my sleep
is deprived
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of sharing bed with him. I have not been able to concentrate on my studies
properly
.

It is a request from my side to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
please
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
me in order to find the another accommodation. I would prefer a single bedroom with an attached washroom in a peaceful environment.

Best,

Jason

IELTS letter Part 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this part. You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter describe the situation explain your problems and why it is difficult to work say what kind of accommodation you would prefer You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

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6 paragraphs
151 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Part 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this part. Write at least 150 words. You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter describe the situation explain your problems and why it is difficult to work say what kind of accommodation you would prefer You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,