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One of your pen pals will shortly be visiting your city. For some reasons, you can not manage to meet him/her at the airport on time. v.4

One of your pen pals will shortly be visiting your city. For some reasons, you can not manage to meet him/her at the airport on time. v. 4
Dear John, Hope you are doing excellent. I am excited to hear that you will visit my city next week. I am so thrilled to have the opportunity to meet you for the first time after so many written correspondences. It will be a great pleasure to finally meet my pen pal after 2 years' written communication. I have made some preparation for your welcome but I regret to inform you I cannot make it to the airport at 8: 30 on Monday due to my meeting with my boss at the same time. I applied for leave but due to the deadlines of a running project, my application was denied. However, I can leave the office just after the meeting. I will be at the airport one and a half hours later than planned. Please wait for me until then. The airport has a small cafeteria and a magazine shop where you can spend some idle time. I would be wearing a formal full-sleeve shirt and a pair of denim jeans. I will be waiting for you at the terminal 7 and would put on my earphones so that you can easily recognise me. Yours truly, Nishath
Dear John,

Hope you are doing excellent. I
am excited
to hear that you will visit my city
next
week. I am
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
thrilled to have the opportunity to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
you for the
first
time after
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
written correspondences.

It will be a great pleasure to
finally
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
my pen pal after 2 years' written communication. I have made
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
preparation for your welcome
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
I regret to inform you I cannot
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
it to the airport at 8: 30 on Monday due to my meeting with my boss at the same time.

I applied for
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
leave
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
due to the deadlines of a running project, my application
was denied
.
However
, I can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
leave
the office
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
after the meeting. I will be at the airport one and a half hours later than planned.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Please
wait for me until then. The airport has a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
small
cafeteria and a magazine shop where you can spend
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
idle time.

I would be wearing a formal full-sleeve shirt and a pair of denim jeans. I will be waiting for you at the terminal 7 and would put on my earphones
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that you can
easily
Possible spelling mistake. 'recognise' is British English.
recognise
me.

Yours
truly
,

Possible spelling mistake found.
Nishath
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS letter One of your pen pals will shortly be visiting your city. For some reasons, you can not manage to meet him/her at the airport on time. v. 4

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
197 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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