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One of your friends has asked you to be a partner in his new start up business. Write a letter

One of your friends has asked you to be a partner in his new start up business. Write a letter lX5eb
Dear Amandeep, I hope you are doing excellent. I am very glad to hearing you decide to start new business. I am sure you decide a open restaurant in the hometown. My best wishes will be always with you. Unfortunately, I will not be able to join with you because of my financial situation is not good as well as I already join a company in the jalandhar cotton industrial. So I can't leave this job. Moreover, my employer is also very cooperative and friendly. My mother is not be well, we every time go hospital for her treatment. You also know my mother heart patient. SO I think it is impossible to join your restaurant project. I am still working full time. Best of luck your new business Iam sure you will sucess without me. Warm wishes, Karmjeet kaur.
Dear Amandeep,

I hope you are doing excellent. I am
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very
glad to hearing you decide to
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start
new business.
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I
am sure you decide
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a
open restaurant in the hometown. My best wishes will be always with you.

Unfortunately, I will not be able to
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join
with you
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because
of my financial situation is not
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good
as well
as I already
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join
a
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company
in the
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jalandhar
cotton industrial.
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So
I can't
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leave
this job.
Moreover
, my employer is
also
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very
cooperative and friendly.

My mother is not
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be
well, we every time go hospital for her treatment. You
also
know my mother heart patient.
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SO
I
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think
it is impossible to
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join
your restaurant project. I am
still
working full time.

Best of luck your new business
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Iam
sure you will
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sucess
without me.

Warm wishes,

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Karmjeet
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kaur
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IELTS letter One of your friends has asked you to be a partner in his new start up business. Write a letter

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
140 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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