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My time, our lives, our future.

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Hello! My name is Emma. I live in bollebygd, me and my family live in a big, white house a little bit from the actual bollebygd. My house is in the woods. I live with my mother Sabina who is 35 years old, my litle sister Ella who is 4 years old and my litle brother Emil who is 12 years old. My mom loves to play piano, the game minecraft and is a good artist. My brother loves to play on his ps4 and make videos. My sister loves to play handball, when she was 2 she always came to look at me playing handball. I like to play on my ps4, hang with my boyfriend and our friends and my bestfriend. My plans for the future is to work as a truckdriver have 1 kid and married. There is not much to do in bollebygd when you don't know anyone but you can take the buss to borås and go to knalleland. Knalleland have beautiful clothes and fun things to take with you home. Back to bollebygd, there are 3 pizzerias in bollebygd to go to but my favorite is the pizzeria "pizza hörnan" you can also go to a playground and swing on a swing. You can also take the buss to gothenburg, gothenburg have many big markets with everything you need in it, i think you can take the buss to ullared to but I'm not sure. I think these things are the most fun for you because you can buy memories and gothenburg is a beautiful place to take pictures at. I dont know anything about Spain but my family is planing to take the us for a carride there so i would like to know the time difference, what you could do there and what places there are to go to.
Hello! My name is Emma. I
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bollebygd
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bollebygd
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with my mother Sabina who is 35 years
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, my
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sister Ella who is 4 years
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and my
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brother Emil who is 12 years
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. My mom
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piano, the game
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minecraft
and is a
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good
artist. My brother
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loves
to
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play
on his ps4 and
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videos.
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My
sister
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handball, when she was 2 she always came to look at me playing handball. I like to
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on my ps4, hang with my boyfriend and our friends and my
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bestfriend
. My plans for the future is to work as a
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truckdriver
have 1 kid and married.

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bollebygd
when you don't know anyone
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you can take the buss to
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borås
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knalleland
.
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have
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clothes and fun things to take with you home. Back to
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bollebygd
, there are 3 pizzerias in
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bollebygd
to go to
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my favorite is the pizzeria
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pizza
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hörnan
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you can
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go to a playground and swing on a swing.

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gothenburg
,
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have
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markets with everything you need in it,
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i
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you can take the buss to
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ullared
to
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I
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these things are the most fun for you
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you can
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buy
memories and
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gothenburg
is a
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beautiful
place to take pictures at.

I
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dont
know anything about Spain
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my family is planing to take
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there
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would like to know the time difference, what you could do there and what places there are to go to.
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IELTS letter My time, our lives, our future.

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  American English
5 paragraphs
307 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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