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Our time, Our future, My life

Our time, Our future, My life QlyoP
Dear Maria Garcia, I hope you are good and everyone is in good health, and no problem for what we did. I hope they come safe to Götoborg, Sweden and we will be waiting for them. I hope the first week they will spend with us will be a great time with them. Even though they are not going to spend all the time with us, I just hope a good time for them no matter what. And I hope they would like the other places in Sweden and I think they will get to know new friends and new places and the language too. Even if they are not going to stay with us it will be our pleasure to meet them and to know some of Spanish language. And I really love Spanish people and their language and their culture even though I didn't meet them but I really love their food and they really know about acting and they have many series and it's amazing, I would like to go there in future cause it's really awesome. Sweden is really perfect in any side it's safe and it's clean and the people are nice and they respect everyone and about school it's the best the teachers are nice and the students are freindly and we also have languges in our school such as: Spanish, German, French and English. And our teacher who teaches Spanish and English called Sergio and he is perfect in language. I hope when the students come to our school will enjoy because we have many activities like: Cooking, Textile, Wood Craft and Sport and sometimes we go somewhere but still I don't know but Sweden is the best without a doubt and I hope every student is visiting Sweden will enjoy the country. And they can visit me in Olsfors, Bollebygd with my mom and my younger brother. We don't live in a place where there is many people but it's safe. And my hobbies: I love music, drawing and basketball. But in my future I want to be a doctor, I don't know how but I love it.
Dear Maria Garcia,

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IELTS letter Our time, Our future, My life

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5.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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