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On a recent holiday, you lost a valuable item. Fortunately you have travel insurance to cover the cost of the lost item.

On a recent holiday, you lost a valuable item. Fortunately you have travel insurance to cover the cost of the lost item. 0DA1
I am writing you in connection with your travel insurance policy which I took to cover our recent holiday trip. Fortunately, the policy covers lost of a valuable item. During my trip I have lost my watch at water park, which was very dear to me as that was a present to me by my late grandfather on the occasion of my graduation and there are lot of sentiments attached to it. I guess the watch has been lost while I was waiting in line to take a water slide named Crazy Loop located on the north side of the water park. I would like you to check with water park authority and see if they have found the item. In case if the same remains lost. I would appericiate it if you can arrange for a same brand watch for me to compensate the loss according to the policy cover. Thanking you in advance for your assistance and I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Steve Jobs
I am writing you in connection with your travel insurance policy which I took to cover our recent holiday trip.
Fortunately
, the policy covers
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lost
of a valuable item.

During my trip I have
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lost
my
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park, which was
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dear to me as that was a present to me by my late grandfather on the occasion of my graduation and there are
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lot of
sentiments attached to it.

I guess the
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has been
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lost
while I was waiting in line to take a
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slide named Crazy Loop located on the north side of the
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park.

I would like you to
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with
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park authority and
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if they have found the item. In case if the same remains
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. I would
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appericiate
it if you can arrange for a same brand
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watch
for me to compensate the loss according to the policy cover.

Thanking you in advance for your assistance and I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours
faithfully
,

Steve Jobs

IELTS letter On a recent holiday, you lost a valuable item. Fortunately you have travel insurance to cover the cost of the lost item.

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7 paragraphs
169 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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