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you recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good.you want to tell him how you feel say how you feel about his performance give details of your musical activities explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities

you recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. you want to tell him how you feel say how you feel about his performance give details of your musical activities explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities bPE6
Dear Mr. John, I am Sandeep living in Mississauga. I am writing this letter requesting you to help me with the musical activites that I have been planning. My friend got the tickets and I was able to attend your concert which was held on last Saturday in my town. I am really impressed by your performance, besides your voice was mesmerizing. I have a great interest in music, and with my friends, I have been planning on organizing a muscial event which is going to be a fund raiser for the Orphan Children welfare Trust. The event is expected to have huge audience and it will extend for three hours in the evening. I would really appreciate it, if you could join us in the event and also give a short performance on the stage. Also, it would be my great pleasure to meet you in person. Hoping for a positive response. Yours Sincerely, Sandy
Dear Mr. John,

I am Sandeep living in Mississauga. I am writing this letter requesting you to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
me with the musical
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activites
that I have been planning.

My friend
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got
the
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
tickets and
I was able to attend your concert which
was held
on last Saturday in my town. I am
really
impressed by your performance,
besides
your voice was mesmerizing.

I have a great interest in music, and with my friends, I have been planning on organizing a
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muscial
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event
which is going to be a
This expression is normally spelled as one or with hyphen.
fund raiser
for the Orphan Children welfare Trust. The
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
event
is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
expected
to have huge audience and it will extend for three hours in the evening.

I would
really
appreciate it, if you could
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
join
us in the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
event
and
also
give a short performance on the stage.
Also
, it would be my great pleasure to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
you in person.

Hoping for a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
response.

Yours
Sincerely
,

Sandy

IELTS letter you recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. you want to tell him how you feel say how you feel about his performance give details of your musical activities explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities

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155 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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