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Hello! My name is Htet Shine Win. My English name is Nicky Brown. My friends call me Nicky Brown. My friends don't call me By my Burmese name. I don't have a girlfriend. I'm a single but most girl think that I have a girlfriend. I'm waiting for attending for university. I am 18 year old. I have a medium high, black hair and I'm handsome. I am polite, warm and kind person but it's only for girl. I am not polite, not warm, not kind on boys. I hate being alone. My Hobby is playing game. I like Multiplayer Online Battle Arena(e. g Mobile legend, LoL), shooting game(e. g Pubg, Cod) and survival game(e. g Minecraft). I like playing game but I am not professional. I like really listen to music. I like listen heavy metal or EDM when I am playing game. It's very exiting. I like watching horror movie. I really like Conjuring universe. They are based on true story. When I was Kid, I wanted to be an adventurer. Now I want to live My life in peace But I still I want to be adventurer if I can.
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Shine Win. My English name is Nicky Brown.
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friends call me Nicky Brown.
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friends don't call me By my Burmese name. I don't have a girlfriend. I'm a single
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most girl
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'm waiting for attending for university.
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am 18 year
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have a medium high, black hair and I'm handsome.

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am polite, warm and kind person
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am not polite, not warm, not kind on boys.
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hate being alone.

My Hobby is playing game. I like Multiplayer Online Battle Arena(e. g Mobile legend, LoL), shooting game(e. g
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, Cod) and survival game(e. g Minecraft). I like playing game
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I am not professional.
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like
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listen to music.
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like listen heavy metal or EDM when I am playing game. It's
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exiting. I like watching horror movie. I
really
like Conjuring universe. They
are based
on true story. When I was Kid, I wanted to be an adventurer.
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Now
I want to
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My life in peace
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I want to be adventurer if I can.
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IELTS letter My profile for the Student Status website

Letter
  American English
3 paragraphs
193 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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