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I have a problem about stray dog in my neighbourhood. I live in big neighbourhood in Denizli. So many stray dog live in my neighbourhood. About 30 dogs. They haven't got a dogs home, dogs food and water. We are in winter so the weather is cold. Probably, they are cold. They are also attacker. Because of that I am scared. I don't want to go somewhere at night. Because they can attack me and I can get hurt. Actually I like dogs but I can't go to near them. I can't play with them. Because they don't like people. They run when see people. I want them to go to the animal shelter. If offical people can come to here and take stray dogs, we can be relax. So they can have dogs home and dogs food and we can go to everywhere esaily at night. It will be good for everyone. My family and I went to Nikfer. Nikfer is a ski resort in Tavas, Denizli. We woke up early in the morning and got ready fast. After breakfast, we left our house by car. My father drove car. We arrived 2 hours later. Weather was snowy and foggy. So we went slowly. The ski resort was crowded. My siblings and I was very exciting. We wore our jumpers and coats fast and went ski lifts. We skied for three hours. After, we was hungry. My father and mother barbecued sausage for us in the snow. After barbecue, we bouhgt sled. We had so much fun with sled. And then, we went to cafe for drank hot something. After left cafe, I couldn't find my wallet. I went to cafe again and found my wallet. The following hours, we left ski resort. Already, our trip was day trip. We arrived one hours later to our house. Because the weather was just cloudy. We were really tried. But our day trip was awesome. Hi everyone, How is it going? Hope you are ok. I have a plan for this weekend. Are you doing anything on this Sunday night? I am planning a sleepover at my house about 8 pm. Can you join it? I am going to bake party cake. I bought candles, balloon and party decorations. I bought pillow, too. Maybe we can have a pilow fight and do karaoke. Anyway, let me know whether you can come. All you need to bring is yourself and pijamas. It would be lovely to see you. Zeynep Dear Zeynep, Long time no see. I hope you are well. Thanks for inviting us on Sunday. I would like to come but ı can't. Because I am going to go to my citiy. On Sunday is my mum birthday. I should be next to her. So I am afraid we can't make it. Anyway, I will let you know how it goes. Let's get together soon. I have got so much to tell you. See you soon, Lale Dear Sir/Madem, I would like to apply for the job waitress. I am a unıversity student. I have a free time. I want to earn some money. Because of that I want to apply. I am study English prep class in university. My lessons finish 12. 10 pm. After 12. 10 pm, I am avaible. But I stay at dorm so I must go to dorm the latest at 11 pm. Last year, I worked White-Green Cafe three months in Denizli. Then, I worked Golden Hotel as a hotelkeeper two years ago in Aydın. If you want to review, I attach a copy of my CV. I am a hardworking. After school, I can work this job esaily. I am a sociable and outgoing person. I can speak fluent English and German. so I can communation with costumer. Also, I am an energetic. I don't tried esaily. I believe this experince will be very useful. I can improve myselve with this job. I look forward to hearing from you, Yours sincerely, Zeynep ÇELİKOĞLU I bought a winter sports jacket for my mum birthday present. I ordered four day ago and this jacket came today. Order was fast and packaging was good. My mum like really jacket's colour when she opened package. Then, My mum wore this jacket. Jacket's size was suitable for my mum. The winter sports jacket has got two big pocket and two small pocket. That pockets has got zippers. I can put my wallet and phone into the pockets. The jacket has got one hat, too. I think the best thing, The jacket is waterproof. My mum can wear esaily in rainy weather. Also, My mum like walking. She can wear it becuse the jacket is sports. The price is reasonable for a jacket with these features. I recommend for anyone who is interested in outside sports.
I have a problem about stray
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
dog
in my
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neighbourhood
. I
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live
in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
big
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neighbourhood
in
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Denizli
.
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So
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many
stray
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dog
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live
in my
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neighbourhood
. About 30
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dogs
. They haven't
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got
a
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dogs
home,
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dogs
food and water. We are in winter
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so
the
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weather
is
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cold
.
Probably
, they are
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cold
. They are
also
attacker.
“Because” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Because
of that I
am scared
. I don't
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want
to go somewhere at night.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Because
they can attack me and I can
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get
hurt. Actually I like
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dogs
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but
I
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can't
There isn't usually a preposition before "near". Did you mean "go near"?
go to near
them. I
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can't
play with them.
“Because” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Because
they don't like
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people
. They run when
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see
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people
. I
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want
them to go to the animal shelter. If
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offical
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people
can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
to here and take stray
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dogs
, we can be
Consider using the past participle "relaxed"?
relax
.
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So
they can have
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dogs
home and
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dogs
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food and
we can
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go to everywhere
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esaily
at night. It will be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
for everyone.

My family and I
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went
to
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Nikfer
.
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Nikfer
is a ski resort in
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Tavas
,
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Denizli
. We woke up early in the morning and
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got
ready
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fast
. After breakfast, we
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
left
our
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house
by car. My father drove car. We arrived 2
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hours
later.
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Weather
was snowy and foggy.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
we
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went
slowly
. The ski resort
was crowded
. My siblings and I was
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very
exciting. We wore our jumpers and coats
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
fast
and
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went
ski lifts. We skied for three
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hours
. After, we
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was
hungry. My father and mother barbecued sausage for us in the snow. After barbecue, we
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bouhgt
sled. We had
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so
much fun with sled. And then, we
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went
to
'cafe' is an imported foreign expression, which originally has a diacritic. Consider using "café"
cafe
for drank hot something. After
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
left
'cafe' is an imported foreign expression, which originally has a diacritic. Consider using "café"
cafe
, I couldn't find my wallet. I
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went
to
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cafe
again and found my wallet. The following
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hours
, we
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left
ski resort. Already, our trip was day trip. We arrived one
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hours
later to our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
.
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Because
the
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weather
was
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
cloudy. We were
really
tried.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
But
our day trip was awesome.

Hi everyone, How is it going? Hope you are ok. I have a plan for this weekend. Are you doing anything on this Sunday night? I am planning a sleepover at my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
about 8 pm. Can you
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join
it? I am going to bake party cake. I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bought
candles, balloon and party decorations.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bought
pillow, too. Maybe we can have a
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pilow
fight and do karaoke. Anyway,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
me know whether you can
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come
. All you need to bring is yourself and
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pijamas
. It would be lovely to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
you.
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Zeynep


Dear
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Zeynep
, Long time no
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
. I hope you are well. Thanks for inviting us on Sunday. I would like to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
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but
ı
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can't
.
“Because” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Because
I am going to go to my
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citiy
. On Sunday is my
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mum
birthday. I should be
next
to her.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
I am afraid we
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can't
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
it. Anyway, I will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
you know how it goes.
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Let
's
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
together
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soon
. I have
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got
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so
much to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
tell
you.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
See
you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
,
Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraph
Lale


Dear Sir/
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Madem
, I would like to apply for the job waitress. I am
Use "an" instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
a
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unıversity
student. I have a free time.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
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want
to earn
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some
money.
“Because” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Because
of that I
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want
to apply. I am study English prep
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class
in university. My lessons finish 12. 10 pm. After 12. 10 pm, I am
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avaible
.
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But
I stay at dorm
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so
I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
go to dorm the latest at 11 pm. Last year, I worked White-Green
'Cafe' is an imported foreign expression, which originally has a diacritic. Consider using "café"
Cafe
three months in
Possible spelling mistake found.
Denizli
. Then, I worked Golden Hotel as a
Possible spelling mistake found.
hotelkeeper
two years ago in
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Aydın
. If you
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want
to review, I attach a copy of my CV. I am
Probably a noun is missing in this part of the sentence.
a hardworking
. After school, I can work this job
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esaily
. I am a sociable and outgoing person. I can speak fluent English and German.
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
so
I can
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communation
with costumer.
Also
, I am an energetic. I don't tried
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esaily
. I believe this
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experince
will be
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
useful.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
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myselve
with this job.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
look forward to hearing from you, Yours
sincerely
,
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Zeynep
Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraph
ÇELİKOĞLU


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I
b
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ought
a winter
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sports
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jacket
for my
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mum
birthday present.
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I
ordered four day ago and this
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jacket
came t
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
oday.
Order was f
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
ast
and packaging was g
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ood.
My
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mum
like
really
jacket's
Possible spelling mistake. 'colour' is British English.
colour
when she opened package. Then, My
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mum
wore this
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jacket
. Jacket's size was suitable for my
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mum
. The winter
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sports
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jacket
has g
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ot
two b
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ig
pocket and two s
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mall
pocket. That pockets
You should probably use "have", "haven".
has
g
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ot
zippers. I can put my wallet and phone into the pockets. The
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jacket
has g
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ot
one hat, too. I t
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hink
the best thing, The
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jacket
is waterproof. My
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mum
can wear
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esaily
in rainy
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weather
. A
lso,
My
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mum
like walking. She can wear it
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becuse
the
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jacket
is
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sports
. The price is reasonable for a
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jacket
with these features. I recommend for anyone who
is interested
in outside
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sports
.
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IELTS letter My personality adjectives

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  American English
5 paragraphs
806 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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