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describe the benefits of sponsering a sports team and paying for open-air concerts.

describe the benefits of sponsering a sports team and paying for open-air concerts. KYD03

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing, as a citizen in your region, to express my opinion on the generous donation you would spend on our community. On the one hand, it is beneficial to invest in a sports team for our children to develop lifelong competences. Not only will it contribute to a boost in a child’s self-esteem and confidence, but it will also allow children to practice social interactions and work together to achieve a common goal. On the other hand, funding for open-air concerts has proven to be an opportunity to relax outdoors. This is because the audience enjoys listening to music in the fresh air rather than in the opera house. Additionally, these events are advantageous for gathering family members or friends to entertain together at the weekends. In my opinion, I would prefer it if the company spent the money on sponsoring a children’s sports team rather than organizing concerts. Because the benefits of the former exceed those of the latter. Thank you for your swift cooperation. Yours faithfully, Kyrillos Gamal

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing, as a citizen in your region, to express my opinion on the generous donation you would spend on our community.

On the one hand, it is beneficial to invest in a sports team for our children to develop lifelong competences. Not This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exclusively
only
 will it contribute to a boost in a child’s self-esteem and confidence, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 it will also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :authorize
allow
 children to practice social interactions and work together to achieve a common goal.

On the other hand
, funding for open-air concerts has proven to be an opportunity to relax outdoors. This is This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 the audience enjoys listening to music in the fresh air rather
 than in the opera This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :residence
house
. Additionally
, these This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :occasionshappenings
events
 are advantageous for gathering family members or friends to entertain together at the weekends.

In my opinion, I would prefer it if the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :enterprisecorporation
company
 spent the money on sponsoring a children’s sports team rather
 than organizing concerts. “Because” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Because
 the benefits of the former exceed those of the latter.

Thank you for your swift cooperation.

Yours faithfully
,

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