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my friends and i, we're here in Sydney!

my friends and i, we're here in Sydney! JK8Ma
Hi Dear Ali my friends and i, we're here in Sydney! It was warn and suny, we're staying in a house, we rented it for two months, it is a beautiful house there is a big pool and there are two bathrooms and four rooms totally, it is great. We usually go to the restaurant for lunch and dinner because we can't cook, the city has more than fifty night clubs and restaurants. Now, i want to tell a little about Australia's nature Australia has a lot of beautiful jungles, lakes, beaches and mountains. it has a lot of wild animals like Kangroos and tigers. I planning to go to Melbourne next week because i have some friends there, i will visit them, i might go to there by car but my friends said: we're going to go there by air plane. But, before
Hi Dear Ali

my friends and i, we're here in Sydney! It was
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and
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suny
, we're staying in a
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house
, we rented it for two months, it is a
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beautiful
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there is a
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big
pool and there are two bathrooms and four rooms
totally
, it is great. We
usually
go to the restaurant for lunch and dinner
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because
we can't cook, the city has more than fifty night clubs and restaurants.

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Now
,
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i
want to
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tell
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little
about Australia's nature

Australia has
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a lot of
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beautiful
jungles, lakes, beaches and mountains.
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it
has
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a lot of
wild animals like
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Kangroos
and tigers.

Did you mean "I'm planning", "I am planning", or "I was planning"?
I planning
to go to Melbourne
next
week
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because
Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.
i
have
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some
friends there,
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i
will visit them,
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i
might
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go to there
by car
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but
my friends said: we're going to go there by air
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plane
.

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IELTS letter my friends and i, we're here in Sydney!

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  American English
4 paragraphs
143 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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