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mr tom and many other video clips taken of his body with out his permission

mr tom and many other video clips taken of his body with out his permission PMVjj
My mother asked me "how was your trip? " yesterday, and I wanted to show this picture to her, but suddenly I figured out that you have another copy of it. I had given my cellphone to my nephew to play with. It may have been his fault. My phone had some problems. One of them was deleting photographs by itself. I think when he was playing car game, this issue happened. I hope you find it easy. I am looking forward to your kid answer. sincerely, MehrshadJabbari
My mother asked me
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how was your trip?
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yesterday
, and I wanted to
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show
this picture to her,
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but
suddenly
I figured out that you have another copy of it.

I had
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given
my cellphone to my nephew to play with. It may have been his fault.

My phone had
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some
problems. One of them was deleting photographs by itself.

I
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think
when he was playing car game, this issue happened. I hope you find it easy.

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I
am looking forward to your kid answer.

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sincerely
,

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MehrshadJabbari
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IELTS letter mr tom and many other video clips taken of his body with out his permission

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  American English
7 paragraphs
87 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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