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mr tom and many other video clips taken of his body with out his permission

mr tom and many other video clips taken of his body with out his permission PMVjj

My mother asked me "how was your trip? " yesterday, and I wanted to show this picture to her, but suddenly I figured out that you have another copy of it. I had given my cellphone to my nephew to play with. It may have been his fault. My phone had some problems. One of them was deleting photographs by itself. I think when he was playing car game, this issue happened. I hope you find it easy. I am looking forward to your kid answer. sincerely, MehrshadJabbari

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how was your trip? Use a smart opening quote here: "“".“
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This sentence does not start with an uppercase letterYesterday
yesterday
, and I wanted to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :demonstrateportrayindicatedisplay
show
 this picture to her, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
suddenly
 I figured out that you have another copy of it.

I had This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :accorded
given
 my cellphone to my nephew to play with. It may have been his fault.

My phone had This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
 problems. One of them was deleting photographs by itself.

I This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :reckonassumebelieveconsider
think
 when he was playing car game, this issue happened. I hope you find it easy.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
 am looking forward to your kid answer.

This sentence does not start with an uppercase letterSincerely
sincerely
,

Possible spelling mistake found.
MehrshadJabbari

IELTS letter mr tom and many other video clips taken of his body with out his permission

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American English

7 paragraphs

87 words

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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1

4.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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One main idea per paragraph
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Include an introduction and conclusion
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Support main points with an explanation and then an example
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Vary your linking phrases using synonyms

Lexical Resource: 6.0

Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes

Grammatical Range: 6.5

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 5.0

Answer all parts of the question
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Present relevant ideas
Fully explain these ideas
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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